Adultery Priya Didi

[shailu4ever]

Excellent update again...the way you wrote about Neetu and Ravi's conversation was really erotic. I liked it. Now coming to the updates where you mentioned about the dinner bloating what i feel is not all characters were required to walk in that line then it becomes obvious to the readers and there is no mystery left to it. If you concentrate only on one character that is Priya in this case would have been more realistic. Something like when they came back to their apartment then priya suddenly says about her tightness of her belly due to rich Dinner which catches Ravi's attention towards her belly and navel. The soft fullness it gained but not completely out of shape just a layer of fullness in her completely flat belly. Like Tammna Bhatiya for example. That would add a erotic feel which clearly goes with the scene you created. But you are a brilliant writer and its just a suggestion. Also you can create a scene going forward between Neetu and Ravi where they decide to secretly go in a restro bar. Neetu as per Ravi s suggestion wears a lehnga or something similar which clearly show's her navel and belly with fullness of her breasts. In the bar she first declines but later on gives in to Ravi's request and have beer and biriyani. There you can use a flirtatious conversation between them suppose in somoking area where Ravi gently give her a belly rub as she drank much beer. You can use burps and erotic expressions with detailed dailogues to make it more realistic. See i am not here to destroy your idea but just giving you suggestions so that you can implement them as its a multi dimensional plot. You are truly a gifted writer and i feel exploring intense erotic pleasure with a poetic style can be the USP of this story...

Hi Raj087

Thank you so much! I’m really glad you enjoyed that part.  You will see more interaction between will happen as the story unfolds. Happy to hear it came through the way I intended. 

Appreciate your support, as always! ?


Regarding the update I wrote for you, I truly did my best with it. As I mentioned earlier, I honestly didn’t feel it was particularly erotic or sensuous, which is why I was not able narrate properly.  I never knew it was erotic.

That said, I’ll see what I can do in the future and try to explore more, depending on how the story evolves.


I truly appreciate your feedback and suggestions and I will see where and how I can fit them in the main plot of the story.

Once again thank you

Warm regards

-- Shailu