Adultery Priya Didi

[khemucha]

Are all the husband here also small dicked and Ravi the massive stud ... like in your other story ... just asking.

You write well and and your attention to detail paints a vivid picture of the space, clothing and the thoughts driving each character in each scene. But your writing style is too staccato for my liking; takes too much effort. I don't know whether its by design or its a result of writing on a mobile. Wish it flowed like normal prose, paragraphs and all. Too bad - for me.

Wishing you all the best for both your stories. I'll skim through at intervals to get a sense of where the character arcs are. Let me leave you with something to mull over. Your talent does not deserve you falling into cliche's to service the norm. Its ok to focus on the characters in play, but morality, societal family values, and reputation are not the only millstones around a married woman's neck. Their partner's qualities and value addition in their lives factor in too. Of course, like some men are womanizers, some women are sluts, whose every thought is auto-wired to weave a justifying shroud for their transgression. The rational brain can justify anything, but the deep seated nature peeps through every now and then. That's missing in your well crafted stories. Dull unattentive boring husbands, lilly-white pure-at-heart perfect suburban wives pining for attention and companionship, and shy young men with an uncanny empathy who know just which buttons to press - its done and dusted with for a couple of centuries. Consider trying something different, with well rounded characters. You have the talent to do it, once you've gone around the mill with these two.