Adultery Antarvasana: The Forbidden Fire – *** Varnika's First Surrender ***

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Varnika (10:57 PM):
Hmm. Sounds dangerously close to flirty.
Goodnight, Mr. Not-So-Shy-Anymore.
Don’t dream about me too obviously. ?

Abhi bit his lower lip, smiling wide now.

Abhi (10:58 PM):
Too late.
Already started.

No reply came after that.

Just the quiet glow of the phone screen dimming… and the soft heat left behind by her final message.



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Hi Shailu,
I'm really enjoying your writing style, particularly your right use of words and expressions. They add a lot of charm and personality to the story.

Specific examples that stood out to me include the exchange where Varnika asks, "What are you staring for?" and Abhiram replies with the playfully suggestive, "There is a lot to choose from." That's a great line!

Another memorable dialogue is the "If you behave, you can see me..." line. The implied question hanging in the air, "If I don't behave...?", adds a delicious layer of suspense. 

And I can't forget Varnika's declaration, "I like dangers." That simple sentence immediately tells us so much about her character – her boldness, her thrill-seeking nature, and even more.

These specific moments, along with the overall narrative style, are key highlights of the story for me. They're what keep me engaged and eager to see where the plot and characters go next. Keep up the great work!
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Hi tweeny_fory,

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and share such thoughtful feedback after a long time.   

It truly made my day!

I’m thrilled that those particular moments stood out to you. It means a lot to hear that the dialogue and the tone landed well.

The playful tension between Varnika and Abhiram is something I’ve really enjoyed crafting, so your comments about those scenes—especially the “There’s a lot to choose from” and the “If you behave…” line—made me smile.

I also really appreciate you picking up on Varnika’s personality. Her boldness is definitely a defining trait, but I’m glad her mischief came through too. It’s that teasing unpredictability that keeps things interesting between her and Abhi.

Your feedback is so encouraging and helps fuel my excitement to keep writing.

I’d love for you to keep reading as the story unfolds, and please do keep letting me know your thoughts.

Your perspective genuinely helps shape the journey!


Warmly,


-- Shailu