Adultery The Untold Story of Abhiram's Erotic Journey - Part 1

[shailu4ever]

I thoroughly enjoyed Abhiram's journey, and appreciate the wonderful writing and narration that brought the story to life.

The teasing and mischievous interactions between characters added to the delight.

However, I did notice that Abhiram seems to be constantly running between multiple women, with the chemistry between them intensifying after each situation. To keep the story engaging, you might consider adding a bit more spice to the narrative.

While slow seduction can be enjoyable, it can also become tedious over time, potentially losing readers' interest. To avoid this, you could introduce action or sexual tension between Abhiram and some of the women sooner.

For instance, Madhavi was introduced relatively early in the story, but her role seemed limited, aside from giving Abhiram halwa (which, in our culture, can be seen as a way of escaping or avoiding him).

To build on this, you could explore the relationships between Abhiram and 2-3 characters at a time, delving deeper into the details of their interactions and seeing how these relationships evolve. This could add more depth and variety to the narrative.

Happy writing, don;t take comments too deep to your mind and go with the flow you have.

@tweeny_fory  Thank you very much for your appreciation.  I am really glad you have taken time to explain the flaws in my story-writing.  I truly take them as constructive.  I too feel that way.  As I mentioned earlier, it is new to me.  I am learning writing stories.

Yes I agree I started with Madhavi, but tried to introduce more characters and trying to balance their chemistry.  I will slowdown introducing more characters and create some tension and romantic scenes between.  Any way, last scene was between Meghana and Abhi. I already drafted a scene that deepen their relationship and build romantic tension.

I really appreciate your extended help while this story shapes up.  Please keep checking my story and give me guidance.  Your suggestions are really valuable for me to understand how to write a story and also shape it up.

Thank you once again

-- Shailu