Adultery First Fire in Abhiram's Erotic Journey - Part 1

[tweeny_fory]

I thoroughly enjoyed Abhiram's journey, and appreciate the wonderful writing and narration that brought the story to life.

The teasing and mischievous interactions between characters added to the delight.

However, I did notice that Abhiram seems to be constantly running between multiple women, with the chemistry between them intensifying after each situation. To keep the story engaging, you might consider adding a bit more spice to the narrative.

While slow seduction can be enjoyable, it can also become tedious over time, potentially losing readers' interest. To avoid this, you could introduce action or sexual tension between Abhiram and some of the women sooner.

For instance, Madhavi was introduced relatively early in the story, but her role seemed limited, aside from giving Abhiram halwa (which, in our culture, can be seen as a way of escaping or avoiding him).

To build on this, you could explore the relationships between Abhiram and 2-3 characters at a time, delving deeper into the details of their interactions and seeing how these relationships evolve. This could add more depth and variety to the narrative.

Happy writing, don;t take comments too deep to your mind and go with the flow you have.