Adultery My wife through the lens of CCTV

[tharkibudda]

That wife and servant short story is one of my all time favourite ... crisp and non-judgemental ... maybe after this one you can try to continue it ... we can discuss some ideas if you like ... its a very old story and I doubt you'll even know who is the original author, let alone trace him/her. one can just continue witha link to the old story.

A similar crisp and non-judgemental story is Jharkhand Style by Ravi Shikha on another forum, but halfway through, the author took off and completed it on Amazon. That story too left me with a sense of non-closure.

As far as your this story is concerned, make up your mind on a good tantalizing closure. That way it won't fizzle out. And you will feel satisfied with a job well done. You are not writing their biography after all. A very good example of a crisp tantalizing end can be seen in "I had to do it", a story in the English section of this forum. If you don't have the time for reading it fully, just read the last few paragraphs. My idea of the husband here switching on the CCTV system again in the end comes from that.

Another well closed soft cuckold story of a wife going astray and the husband knows where the couple pull through intact is "A Wife's Journey by abcxyz13" and its sequel "A Wife's Journey continues by abcxyz13" both posted by Ramesh_Rocky in the English section of this forum. But the couple are a bit free nd open minded in these, which is in contrast to the couple in this story so far.

Regarding your other story "Village is no place ..." the sex was too abrupt without proper build-up of the characters. And it was too non-consensual. The men are too crude and the scenes comes across as sexual assault. Physiological response to forced simulation is not consent or even reluctance. I for one did not enjoy sampling it. If you have a broader story-line for it, consider rewriting it. Else forget it as just one of those things.

I am writing all this because you have a flair for writing and have developed this story well. Great AI work, by the way, very apt. Look forward to more of it, but not at the cost of story updates. As far as update frequency is concerned, I for one never ask for updates because I know how hard it is to write even a paragraph. Take your time, dish out quality content, keep it crisp. You deserve to complete this story.

Thanks Khemucha for your detailed analysis. A well directed criticism is better than 100 praises. Maybe had someone said my village story was getting beyond the limit. I might have changed it than waiting for a response.

I've seen many stories in old xossip and Literotica lose their way because the author keeps adding more chapters because they love the characters built and it becomes stale. I hope i dont do the same even though I have a couple of characters to be added later if it goes well without upsetting the cart.

I can pull you into confidence if this story goes well and has a good readership.

I'll check the stories you sent when i get time and see how I can take inspiration from them

Thanks again