22-05-2025, 12:45 PM
(This post was last modified: 22-05-2025, 12:59 PM by Haran000. Edited 1 time in total. Edited 1 time in total.)
Shamson bro,
Story is good and immersive. Meera, Priya, Arjun characters well established. Priya teasing naughtiness is very captivating. Arjun's determination towards meera is so profound, waiting for both of their actual confrontation, opening up to eachother. However, addition to positives, there are few negatives. Why are you writing the scene of meera priya chit chat first then giving the pov of arjun later? Mix it up bro. It didn't felt good. Sorry to criticize, but it actually can be even better like that. And change the scenes and scenaries, after 35 posts one vacation, otherwise previous whole posts are in college premises and same waist fantasy, tention.
Sorry if I commented somewhat negatively, i just wanted to tell straight, what I felt.
Keep going, waiting for lovely Meera erotic sexcapades.
Story is good and immersive. Meera, Priya, Arjun characters well established. Priya teasing naughtiness is very captivating. Arjun's determination towards meera is so profound, waiting for both of their actual confrontation, opening up to eachother. However, addition to positives, there are few negatives. Why are you writing the scene of meera priya chit chat first then giving the pov of arjun later? Mix it up bro. It didn't felt good. Sorry to criticize, but it actually can be even better like that. And change the scenes and scenaries, after 35 posts one vacation, otherwise previous whole posts are in college premises and same waist fantasy, tention.
Sorry if I commented somewhat negatively, i just wanted to tell straight, what I felt.
Keep going, waiting for lovely Meera erotic sexcapades.
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