04-04-2025, 08:17 AM
Just now i finished reading the whole thread.. To be frank story was good but i feel some places can be improved...
1. 6 ppl other than her husband used her but u never mentioned anything about her mangalsutra? U can add spice by making her play with it or degrade it...
2. 6 ppl used her but she is nor pregnant... How? Never mentioned regarding how she protected herself from it..
3. Last but not least... Why didnt tushar able to understand his wife had sex with 6 ppl apart from him... By seeing her ass he can understand...
So request u to work on these areas if u feel my doubt logical
1. 6 ppl other than her husband used her but u never mentioned anything about her mangalsutra? U can add spice by making her play with it or degrade it...
2. 6 ppl used her but she is nor pregnant... How? Never mentioned regarding how she protected herself from it..
3. Last but not least... Why didnt tushar able to understand his wife had sex with 6 ppl apart from him... By seeing her ass he can understand...
So request u to work on these areas if u feel my doubt logical