Adultery Love Sex And War Part 1 : Age Of Darkness

[RCF]

  I think wht dean meant to say is story has flaws and predictability is their this is his frst story right correcting n criticism two different thing and that to coming form u

Yes but that's how we learn, I only meant to correct it so the rest of the plot will be corrected if its going to be too predictable. First story so no criticism means its not right. I gave credit where due, Harry's writing in sex scenes is top notch and well described, that's his strength and if he can get the plot right around it, he will be one of good writers here.