11-03-2025, 10:17 PM
(10-03-2025, 04:14 PM)Rocky@handsome Wrote: Undoubtedly it's very good story...Hi bro,
Few suggestions please don't get me wrong please..
1) Please don't make the son cuck, it will spoil all eroticism and adventures
2) needs some serious editing coz ..sometimes it's very difficult to understand who is speaking- many times you are using "He" for female character and "She"for male characters..it's really confusing..
3) Hopefully u would narrate from Mom's POV- we can get the clear picture of Mom's feeling as well and we will get to know How it all started and the details of every encounter between Mom and Sam -Surely it would be much more interesting
Keep it up - once again would honestly like to say it's really really good story.
Best regards-
Keep updating❤️
1. I am a Japanese writer. I am writing for japanese forum. So while using online translation tool few error is bound to happen. But those are very minor and easy to understand.
2. In future there will be other person's PO. I can't share the details now.
3.Have patience and all the details of how the mother was seduced will be unfolded.



