Adultery Broken trust and suppressed lust

[amirrulezmir]

The author is building up a great story. I will give him that credit. I would like the give few suggestions:
1. Stick to the old way of narration like office, dinner time, late night room mobile chat and various P.O.Vs.
2. I would be great if the sexual tension builds up to the wedding of Afrah and Sohail. As author has established that initially afrah was shy, later she became desperate and now she is being manipulated while being told the she has power over her lover.

I would request author , if you are planning to make afrah have sex before marriage then it's OK but I would say let her do it on her mehndi day, wedding day and reception day in her various wedding dresses to please her lover.

On mehndi day she can not use her hand as it will ruin her mehendi.

3. It might sound a bit kinky but let her save all the cumshots in a bottle and drink it on her wedding day infront of guests while her boss is watching, without anyone knowing.

4. I would like author to give a flashback P.O.V how afrah cleaned the cumshot from her body from the restaurant washroom incident, or did she taste is when she went back home just to tease his boss.

5. If afrah wants she can be as demanding as she wants. As she has the choice leading a thrilling and adventurous life without any one knowing.

Rest I leave it to the author , I trust his writing but I would just like to add you have very well established afrah wants to be modest to her family and qould be husband but still she wants to try every new adventure

All the best