04-01-2025, 08:57 PM
Hi Kuttoosan,
I was bored with the stories on xossipy and just stumbled upon your story..... Can't explain what a great story you have written..... From past 3 days I have been reading this story continuously...... Skipped my office work for 2 days as well...... You can say I took leave for 2 days just to complete your story...... I can't believe what a foolish I was that this masterpiece was sitting here from past 5-6 years here in the English section and I thought the English stories might not be pleasurable so ignored english section most of the time..... I really loved the way you have carried this story ahead..... I mean whenever a situation or character was about to become boring you either introduced a new character or a new situation or an old character returned...... And you did it with such ease like a skilled writer...... I must that in the middle the story kind of become a boring with Jaya and Raghu..... And I think I know why because those two characters were exploring each other..... Plus I whenever sex would happen between them, since their sex style would be similar, so I think you copied the sex part from their previous encounters and repeated it everytime sex between Jaya and Raghu happened..... but I appreciate the fact that in order to keep the story interesting you have shortened the length of the sex part as well which is great and smart thinking and removed unnecessary and unrequited details..... There is another reason why I am saying that you are a great writer because sometimes other writers introduce a character and then they don't know how to plan their exit and because of this they either leave the story in between or they give an abrupt exit to a character from a point of no return..... But the exits of your characters are all well planned and look natural like something what happens to us in life..... Like Shekhar uncle shifting his house, or Mani's parents taking him to some other place for better future or Rahim meeting with an accident and his relatives taking him and his wife to another place for better treatment..... This way whenever a character gets boring they got replaced smartly and if needed in future they can be brought back..... Another reason why you are a smart writer because most of the High class wife stories I have read earlier, I have noticed that the writer starts his story with a lot of enthusiasm but when they get stuck they just go for an easy route and make the husband a cuckold who always had a fantasy to see his wife getting fucked by someone else but you went natural that when Jaya started to feel bad about cheating on her husband she gets to know that he also misses her but still is cheating on her at the same time..... Mentioning about women on periods or women avoiding sex because they are genuinely busy or contraceptive pills also makes your story natural..... Although I know that you already have your story thought out I still have few suggestions -
1. Whenever you post an update please give it a read before posting it because I have noticed that sometimes the character's thoughts and feelings are similar when they are with other characters like Jaya felt pleasure with Mani and had the best fuck of her life but when she had sex with Raghu, again felt that she had her best. I mean she can compare her sex with Raghu with the her sex with Mani but everytime she can't feel that she never felt good while having sex in a very long time. Same goes for Raghu, I mean he can be confused between Jaya and Ashima but that is it because what he is doing with Ashima he has already done with Jaya so while having great time with Ashima he can think about his time with Jaya, what he did that Jaya liked and try to replicate the same thing on Ashima. Another reason why I am asking you to read your future updates before posting because sometimes I have noticed that Raghu becomes Ramu or Rahim or there is a conversation between Ashima and Raghu but instead of Ashima you have written Jaya.... Or there are some inconsistency in the scene from the previous updates or timeline.
2. I thought Mani is gone for good but he returned and I can't tell you how happy I am to see Mani return. For Mani's character I think he needs to get a small revenge from Jaya. Frankly speaking whenever I saw a porn where a guy is peeing on a girl or I read a male character peeing on the female character and her liking that I personally felt disgusted but when Mani did it to Jaya and she slapped him, I felt angry because he did it by mistake. Now since Jaya has agreed that she won't get angry if he peed on her again. So my request is that if in future you plan on someone peeing on Jaya please, please let it be Mani and it would be better if he does it again accidentally but this time Jaya likes it and asks him to pee again and actually drinks his pee to suprise and reminds Mani about that slap and says that she drank his pee as a punishment for that slap.
3. I know you have time and again said that there is no way Rahim is coming back but it would be great if he can ever come back because he was the one because of whom all this started. He may not return as her security guard but in a different scenario maybe his wife's family members threw him out of their home as he was becoming a burden on them because he doesn't do any work because of his accident and now he is a beggar and Jaya just finds him in new city brings takes care of him and pleasures him for a couple of days.
4. If possible see if Raghu can fuck Jaya or Ashima while they are doing phone sex with their husbands on audio call.
5. I know you have done this earlier but can just mention again the age and height of all the characters like Rahim, Mani, Raghu, Jaya, Ashima and also make Javed 16 or 17 years of age instead of 14 so that it becomes easier for us to imagine the characters and scenes when we read the story again.
I also would like to mention how different every character is from one another whether it is in age, stamina, physical appearance or dick size. This brings a freshness and rawness in the story like Shekhar uncle was old, his dick size and stamina was similar to Mahesh but Jaya still fucked her because of the excitement that he brought in her life. Ideally in most of the stories where multiple male characters are there, every male character has a big cock and is excellent fucker except for the heroine's husband which makes the story unrealistic, good for one time read only and all characters look similar after one point but in your story every character is different and meets Jaya under different circumstances and plays a significant part to take the story forward.....
I would also like to appreciate all the readers of this story who have been with this story from the beginning. You guys are the true admirers of this story and have shown a lot of patience.
Also, I like to appreciate a reader HERBIE, man hats off to you. No matter the story, but to add extra spice you always come up with unique AI images and gifs as per the story's situation or update highlights. I know it is a very tedious task but hats off to you man.
Thanks Kuttoosan.
I was bored with the stories on xossipy and just stumbled upon your story..... Can't explain what a great story you have written..... From past 3 days I have been reading this story continuously...... Skipped my office work for 2 days as well...... You can say I took leave for 2 days just to complete your story...... I can't believe what a foolish I was that this masterpiece was sitting here from past 5-6 years here in the English section and I thought the English stories might not be pleasurable so ignored english section most of the time..... I really loved the way you have carried this story ahead..... I mean whenever a situation or character was about to become boring you either introduced a new character or a new situation or an old character returned...... And you did it with such ease like a skilled writer...... I must that in the middle the story kind of become a boring with Jaya and Raghu..... And I think I know why because those two characters were exploring each other..... Plus I whenever sex would happen between them, since their sex style would be similar, so I think you copied the sex part from their previous encounters and repeated it everytime sex between Jaya and Raghu happened..... but I appreciate the fact that in order to keep the story interesting you have shortened the length of the sex part as well which is great and smart thinking and removed unnecessary and unrequited details..... There is another reason why I am saying that you are a great writer because sometimes other writers introduce a character and then they don't know how to plan their exit and because of this they either leave the story in between or they give an abrupt exit to a character from a point of no return..... But the exits of your characters are all well planned and look natural like something what happens to us in life..... Like Shekhar uncle shifting his house, or Mani's parents taking him to some other place for better future or Rahim meeting with an accident and his relatives taking him and his wife to another place for better treatment..... This way whenever a character gets boring they got replaced smartly and if needed in future they can be brought back..... Another reason why you are a smart writer because most of the High class wife stories I have read earlier, I have noticed that the writer starts his story with a lot of enthusiasm but when they get stuck they just go for an easy route and make the husband a cuckold who always had a fantasy to see his wife getting fucked by someone else but you went natural that when Jaya started to feel bad about cheating on her husband she gets to know that he also misses her but still is cheating on her at the same time..... Mentioning about women on periods or women avoiding sex because they are genuinely busy or contraceptive pills also makes your story natural..... Although I know that you already have your story thought out I still have few suggestions -
1. Whenever you post an update please give it a read before posting it because I have noticed that sometimes the character's thoughts and feelings are similar when they are with other characters like Jaya felt pleasure with Mani and had the best fuck of her life but when she had sex with Raghu, again felt that she had her best. I mean she can compare her sex with Raghu with the her sex with Mani but everytime she can't feel that she never felt good while having sex in a very long time. Same goes for Raghu, I mean he can be confused between Jaya and Ashima but that is it because what he is doing with Ashima he has already done with Jaya so while having great time with Ashima he can think about his time with Jaya, what he did that Jaya liked and try to replicate the same thing on Ashima. Another reason why I am asking you to read your future updates before posting because sometimes I have noticed that Raghu becomes Ramu or Rahim or there is a conversation between Ashima and Raghu but instead of Ashima you have written Jaya.... Or there are some inconsistency in the scene from the previous updates or timeline.
2. I thought Mani is gone for good but he returned and I can't tell you how happy I am to see Mani return. For Mani's character I think he needs to get a small revenge from Jaya. Frankly speaking whenever I saw a porn where a guy is peeing on a girl or I read a male character peeing on the female character and her liking that I personally felt disgusted but when Mani did it to Jaya and she slapped him, I felt angry because he did it by mistake. Now since Jaya has agreed that she won't get angry if he peed on her again. So my request is that if in future you plan on someone peeing on Jaya please, please let it be Mani and it would be better if he does it again accidentally but this time Jaya likes it and asks him to pee again and actually drinks his pee to suprise and reminds Mani about that slap and says that she drank his pee as a punishment for that slap.
3. I know you have time and again said that there is no way Rahim is coming back but it would be great if he can ever come back because he was the one because of whom all this started. He may not return as her security guard but in a different scenario maybe his wife's family members threw him out of their home as he was becoming a burden on them because he doesn't do any work because of his accident and now he is a beggar and Jaya just finds him in new city brings takes care of him and pleasures him for a couple of days.
4. If possible see if Raghu can fuck Jaya or Ashima while they are doing phone sex with their husbands on audio call.
5. I know you have done this earlier but can just mention again the age and height of all the characters like Rahim, Mani, Raghu, Jaya, Ashima and also make Javed 16 or 17 years of age instead of 14 so that it becomes easier for us to imagine the characters and scenes when we read the story again.
I also would like to mention how different every character is from one another whether it is in age, stamina, physical appearance or dick size. This brings a freshness and rawness in the story like Shekhar uncle was old, his dick size and stamina was similar to Mahesh but Jaya still fucked her because of the excitement that he brought in her life. Ideally in most of the stories where multiple male characters are there, every male character has a big cock and is excellent fucker except for the heroine's husband which makes the story unrealistic, good for one time read only and all characters look similar after one point but in your story every character is different and meets Jaya under different circumstances and plays a significant part to take the story forward.....
I would also like to appreciate all the readers of this story who have been with this story from the beginning. You guys are the true admirers of this story and have shown a lot of patience.
Also, I like to appreciate a reader HERBIE, man hats off to you. No matter the story, but to add extra spice you always come up with unique AI images and gifs as per the story's situation or update highlights. I know it is a very tedious task but hats off to you man.
Thanks Kuttoosan.
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