Adultery The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal.
(13-11-2024, 03:26 AM)RCF Wrote: Have been saying same, Lot of readers forced this submission if you ask me. I was expecting a phone call to distract Shipra but it did not happen. Disappointed was well!

Now enjoy non stop sex ..Lost half of the thrill.

I know RCF, most of the time we think a lot alike.

(13-11-2024, 07:22 AM)suryaspk Wrote: I too had similar kind of thoughts. But we have to accept it's erotica a sex story. 
Shipra seems to be smart one but the moment she made the agreement sex became inevitable. It's a slipper slope, two people can't engage in oral sex and expect to maintain boundary for so long. At the end she too has needs.

And think which is better ordeal whether Shipra gets out of this with dignity or she trusts Patode, betrayed then gets out of it(I hope she gets out of this).

And patode is playing dangerous game, let's see how long he can manipulate both parties.

I still have hope on author he can still deliver something good.

You made some very good practical point, agreed you can't maintain in just oral sex. Waiting to see how the story plays out.

(13-11-2024, 08:32 PM)Suraj76626 Wrote: Dear xossissippi,

Thanks for your continuous support and indulgence in my work. I really appreciate your attachment to the story and hence such a long detailed critique.

I will try to explain each and every point you have raised with the reasoning behind it.

How the things ended up with Shipra - Well from Chapter one it was clear how the things will end up with Shipra...It's an erotica...duhhhhh...... It took more than 6 months for me....40-45 chapter and almost if not more than 200k words to reach here. This situation did not fell out of blue, It was building up to it.

Don't judge Shipra's fall from a male point of view. Keep in mind Shipra's mindset as well. In the story so far we can deduct that
a. Shipra wanted a simple married life but was forced to bear all the family responsibilities by he husband without caring for her wishes.
b. Shipra was sexually frustrated. Due to Alok.
c. She was stressed about getting a promotion, which she didn't wanted. Yet again due to Alok.
d. She was constantly being instigated against Alok by Namrata ever since she joined her in Amruj.
e. She was attracted towards Patode. She admitted herself.
f. Patode was constantly making sexual advances towards her.
g. She felt alone, not being supported by her husband. Patode provided that support.
h. She was aroused seeing Namrata and Patode's affair.
i. Patode had already done everything with her beside having sex.

But all the above points are not the reason for Shipra's behavior. They are just building blocks for what came next.

To understand it better let me explain it with an example-

Irrespective of the gender how does strong people act when they are too much stressed with constant troubles of our life, feel alone, frustrated and constantly made to do a work they hate (Like me doing my job  banghead  ) ?
They soldier through with a smile and keep doing it..... until they had enough.
And once their limit is breached, it only takes a small vulnerable moment for their strong outward appearance to crumble.

This is what happened to Shipra in that particular moment of the night when Patode and she kissed. The molestation at hands of Alokk was her breaking point. She had enough. Enough of being at the receiving end of troubles. For her Patode was her savior,  he not only saved her but also saved Sanju. He not only cared for her but supported her. He was the male in her life which understood her. And thus she lowered her guards for him. For her Patode was an escape from all her troubles and person with whom she felt safe and valued. She never intended to have sex with him but in spur of moment things went out of her hands which I have explained in detail in the chapter.

I think it covers point 1 to 3 of your critique.

For point 4 - Alokk and Hitesh - They are rowdy young village boys -  What mastermind plan could they conjure? Alokk was never able to seduce Shipra unlike Patode. He was just lucky that Shipra was drunk and his name was same as her husband.

Shipra's readiness for sex - On the contrary to what you said, it was the molestation which proved the breaking point for Shipra as mentioned above. She never planned in her mind to have sex with Patode..Never.... But what Patode had done that day, the way he supported her, the way he made her trust him and assured her of her safety made Shipra obliged to thank him. So she decided to give him the reward of the morning but as I have explained above it was a very vulnerable moment for Shipra. A series of reasons mentioned above clubbed with her growing affection towards Patode led one to another and she allowed Patode to go all the way.

Difference between Shipra and Namrata - Wait for next few chapters to find out.

iv) v) -  It doesn't need a explanation -  It but obvious all these things are happening in the background I cannot go in such details or this story will have 100 more chapters.


vi) See the timeline of the story my friend it has been only a few days not even a month has passed.

vii) You have answered it yourself -  Not important. -  Not all old men in an erotica are pervert. Sleepy

The story is about Shipra's ordeals not Patode's ordeal or Toppo's ordeal -  So it was bound to happen but the story is not finished so tables can turn.

You're the first one to think that the story has dwelled to much on sexual interactions so thanks. Someone in the comment even call the story non erotic. I don't know what people want from an erotica... fight

Anyway your comment is welcomed and I hope you stick around as the story has lot to give still. Many twist and turns in the waiting. Cheers.

Hi Suraj, thank you very much for taking time out to respond i truly appreciate it. In love with this beautiful world you've created. My last suggestion is you have the talent to make the story complex and intricate and with lot of suspense. Go for it! Good luck!
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RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by BANK - 10-06-2024, 02:16 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 26-06-2024, 01:22 AM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 06-07-2024, 07:48 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 06-07-2024, 07:45 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 13-08-2024, 09:48 AM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 22-08-2024, 12:00 AM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 21-08-2024, 11:55 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 06-09-2024, 02:52 AM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 06-09-2024, 05:42 AM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 06-09-2024, 08:15 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 22-09-2024, 05:18 AM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 26-09-2024, 10:38 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 30-10-2024, 02:27 AM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 02-11-2024, 08:26 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 05-11-2024, 08:40 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 08-11-2024, 07:13 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 07-11-2024, 12:19 AM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 08-11-2024, 07:11 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 13-11-2024, 03:26 AM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by xossissippi - 17-11-2024, 11:40 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 01-12-2024, 03:46 AM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 06-12-2024, 10:27 PM
RE: The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal. - by RCF - 10-12-2024, 08:43 PM



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