04-11-2024, 01:56 PM
(This post was last modified: 04-11-2024, 01:58 PM by Naruto411. Edited 1 time in total. Edited 1 time in total.)
(04-11-2024, 12:46 PM)cool.smart2 Wrote: Excellent bro….the setting, built up and choice of words very sensual and erotic. But, I have few things to suggest:
1) I feel, readers...more
6) If possible, initially erotic chats at night and later some very dirty chats
between them.
I hope you will take this positively bro. Eagerly looking forward to hot updates with more naughty words. Waiting ….
Thank you for the advice I will make sure to take it while I make next parts of the story
Feel free to critique 
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