12-10-2024, 06:59 AM
To be very honest...few things felt out of place...she opening up in front of her friend wasn't looking realistic...sazida coming from her room and she not confronted her husband...i woguld request you to focus more on seduction part of the lead character...let this be a affair kinda theme b not hubby turning sissy...arav has tattoo only but real m would do khatna...would that be on list its a matter to see...don't do 100 things at a time...do 1 thing best...enjoying your writing...anybody who likes to have detailed discussion with no limits regarding this story msg me