[maharsha25]

No offense bro but the plot went haywire, lacking erotic elements in this chapter. The conversation went on and on and never transitioned into a sex sequence quite when it required. Shipra doesn't look aroused rather the whole aspect of compulsions seems a bit overused in other numerous sex stories. In your chapters 8 and 9, Shipra was playfully seduced and a willing participant since she was purely sexually aroused, yet did not have any other motives to engage in a threesome. Somehow, it seems you can't seem to connect from where you left out in the chapter 15, the part where alok was calling and Shipras phone was buried under the saree and sweaty bodies were fukcing each other under a beam of moonlight. Some ending parts of a chapter triggers such a suspense and excitement among the readers, while the subsequent chapters don't match the same level of sensation as compared to the end part of the preceding chapter. In a sense , the plot lacks proper flow in narration between chapters. What should have been a legendary sexual narration ended up being a meaningless futile conversation of cat and mouse game between parode and the other two. It could have been simpler but the prolonged conversations really blew the air when all that was required was descriptions of a threesome sex.