19-08-2024, 10:06 PM
The story is too flat & predictable.
Directly jumping into sex without any seduction, kinkiness or erotism.
Slow pace with progress matters the most.
Making the readers anticipate & crave for the next updates is the success of a story.
Highly disappointing with your narration.
Directly jumping into sex without any seduction, kinkiness or erotism.
Slow pace with progress matters the most.
Making the readers anticipate & crave for the next updates is the success of a story.
Highly disappointing with your narration.


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