28-06-2024, 12:02 PM
(26-06-2024, 02:37 PM)Therocksayys Wrote: I’ll give you my honest review as I am someone who loves your writing and regard you as the top writer on this forum.
When I first started reading this story it made me crazy and I couldn’t stop reading it over and over again. Just the way you wrote the expression of Nusrat when she saw her old tormentor Raghu chacha after so many years. Up until the last update when Raghu chacha almost had her under her control. It was so kinky and felt like I’m watching a movie.
But then I started to sense that the story is going to be involving other characters so early in the story which will make Raghu and Nusrat’s encounters mix with others - like her neighbour aunty which is not my favourite part.
There are so many good stories end up losing its original plot when the main character, Raghu in this story, will be fucking her neighbour and she will just look and masturbate.
For example there was Akmas story - a hot housewife and bahu ends up gets fucked by watchman and plumber but then the writer for no reason involved her old 50 year old sass and the next two months it was all about sass and watchman while Akmas just watches them and masturbates.
I just don’t think when an old horny man has a young beautiful lady to use and all he’s interested in fucking an old lady with no chemistry whatsoever.
Another story Aslam ki Rand Dr Kamya was such a huge success because it was just about Aslam and Kamya. ASLAM fucked her in every update and readers loved it. That’s because the main focus was always on Kamya and Aslam was only interested to fuck her and make her his rand.
Of course other characters can be added in the story for a little cocktail but before the readers actually get to see the full chemistry between the two main characters, the other character hijacks the whole story in its early stages.
When you say people are not replying, I believe that’s because they are only interested in Nusrat and Raghu. I’m not getting any kinks seeing Raghu and Sudha Aunty. They can of course come later in the story but what I’ve thought this story to be and where I’m seeing it’s headed kind of loses interest.
I don’t know if you have seen Japanese Jav porn but they are the epitome of kinkiness and horniness. It’s mostly about cheating wife and old man young girl kind of theme and only focus on two characters. The evil guy keeps coming back to house to fulfils his lust and the girl eventually gives up and becomes his whore to use any way he wants.
Please forgive me if I’ve upset you with my review. Of course you’re the brain behind this hottest story and maybe you know what we don’t know and you may prove us all wrong by giving a whole different kinky surprise updates in the future.
Please don’t close this story. It’s the best story I’ve ever red. Please consider my thoughts and disregard if you find this nonsense.
From your honest reader.
Regards.
Thanks for the comment. I agree sudha's charchter isn't everyone's type but who said she is second MC of the syory!? Even in muskan's story few people showed disinterest when i introduced a side charchter for particular buildup. The idea behind introduction of sudha's role is to give that little spark in nusrat's long forgotten lust cum submissiveness towards raghu which might have lowered post getting married to kabir.
I thought everyone will get this thing. It's quiet awkard for me to come & explain.
Thanks though, really appreciate it & don't worry this story will get its deserving end.
My work
1. Koel, ek masoom housewife
2. Bade ghar ki bahu betiyan
3. Game of lust
4. Kahani ek bade ghar ki
5. Muskan
6. Tale of a lustful revenge
1. Koel, ek masoom housewife
2. Bade ghar ki bahu betiyan
3. Game of lust
4. Kahani ek bade ghar ki
5. Muskan
6. Tale of a lustful revenge