Adultery The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal.

[Bobby9034]

Suraj bro your writing skills are fantastic, the way you’ve written the characters,  plot, dialogues,  everything is amazing. How the latest update has fitted so nicely with what happened previously shows you have a talent.

I’m loving Shirpa’s dilemma in her bodies needs and her morals.  She’s a good wife, loves her husband but she wants to experience the same pleasure as her friend.  The  committed wife feels the guilt even though she is sexually deprived. Going back and reading the scene where she feels shame and sadness looking at her mangulsutra is going to be such a turn on after she gives into her lust, the devoted housewife turning into a nymph is going to be so hot, I can’t wait.  Her mangulsutra right now is stopping her from taking the next step but afterwards it won’t have the power to stop her 

Even though Namrata is a strong part of the story and important to the plot, I only see her as a side kick to Shirpa, I’m more interested in Shirpa and seeing her get closer to the men in the story, especially the young boys and the other men at her work.  

So far the only slight criticism I have is that Shirpa doesn’t think of her son as much as she should, as a Mother I think he would be in her thoughts a lot more.  Leaving him behind must be very hard for her, maybe a few lines about that might make her inner turmoil more relatable.  Otherwise everything else is fantastic.  Please continue.