13-06-2024, 10:52 AM
Hi Mintu08,
Very good plot and nice build up. Few Suggestions from my end
Don't make it brutal. Bashir is a don to show is dominance and Alpha seeds not to show the brutality.
Build it slowly. Roma is nice loving, caring, loyal wife but deep down she has a woman in her who deserve the fullfillment. Though rajesh loves her but woman in her needs more which even Roma is not away as she has never thought of it.
Roma knows she is beautiful and got male attention everywhere she goes and she drew a line to keep it away.
The story should progress how Bashir breaks this fencing with his manipulative skills, first ecounter can be bit of forced but slowly he should ignite the spark of lust in Roma.
The story should progress as journey of a loyal wife to a slut of Alpha bull Bashir.
Also the introduction of Rushita is too early, once Roma is trapped and slowly on the path of lust then you can introduce another female character otherwise it will divert the focus form Roma to Rushita. Roma should be the lead character and others to support.
These are just a suggestions you are the writer and owner of this story and can use the liberty. We will follow it with joy.
All the best
Very good plot and nice build up. Few Suggestions from my end
Don't make it brutal. Bashir is a don to show is dominance and Alpha seeds not to show the brutality.
Build it slowly. Roma is nice loving, caring, loyal wife but deep down she has a woman in her who deserve the fullfillment. Though rajesh loves her but woman in her needs more which even Roma is not away as she has never thought of it.
Roma knows she is beautiful and got male attention everywhere she goes and she drew a line to keep it away.
The story should progress how Bashir breaks this fencing with his manipulative skills, first ecounter can be bit of forced but slowly he should ignite the spark of lust in Roma.
The story should progress as journey of a loyal wife to a slut of Alpha bull Bashir.
Also the introduction of Rushita is too early, once Roma is trapped and slowly on the path of lust then you can introduce another female character otherwise it will divert the focus form Roma to Rushita. Roma should be the lead character and others to support.
These are just a suggestions you are the writer and owner of this story and can use the liberty. We will follow it with joy.
All the best