06-06-2024, 03:22 AM
Dear Author,
I stumbled upon your story by chance, and I must say, it looks quite promising. I've just finished Chapter 3, and while I'm unsure of what lies ahead in the subsequent chapters, I'm filled with curiosity and excitement to discover more.
One aspect I truly appreciate about your storytelling is your slow and steady pace. Rather than rushing into explicit scenes, you're focusing on building the narrative—a crucial foundation. Till now story sounds quite realistic.
I hope the gradual development continues, the way you're doing. However, I do have a few suggestions, if you're open to them:
1. While I understand this is your story, I've always believed that erotica with a realistic approach have the potential to become epics. Remember, you're writing an erotica, not some porn video script. Take your time, and let intimacy unfold organically, avoiding illogical leaps just to satisfy certain readers' demands to see Shipra getting fucked.
2. Many inexperienced authors resort to clichés like taking the excuse of wife cheating on her husband or indulging in sex with some other guy on the pretext of her husband not sexually competent or weak at sex or may be things have turned boring in bed. Please don't take the same path in your story.
Its always more exciting when a couple is madly in love and are happy with each other, even in bed. Seducing a loyal, strong character woman is the ultimate challenge & fun rather than a woman who is easy and can be manipulated to have sex just because she is desperate.
3. I would suggest to stop sharing your future ideas of the story witn readers. Like I went through one of your comments where you confirm that Shipra has some hidden slut in her and also revealing about Shipra's ex bf a bit. Why do this ? It would simply take away the charm because most of the readers will have set their minds that Shipra has slutty character hidden in her.
This is directly attacking on her character which you are still building up. Once her character is soiled, nothing would be left in the story.
4. It's essential to maintain Shipra's integrity as a character. Please don't turn Shipra in some betraying slut who starts opening her legs easily in future. Surely, there would be sex episodes of her but they should happen with logic which makes sense and sounds realistic. If Shipra gets fucked once, doesn't mean she would open her legs easily next time for anyone. Never turn her into a slut character. Her character should still remain the same i.e hard to get. Hopefully you wouldn't take the route of blackmailing either as it would simply kill the buzz.
5. Looks like Toppo is looking for some revenge. Now its up to you if he actually gets the complete revenge or Shipra is smart enough to outwit him in his own game and never gets to lose her dignity completely even after getting fucked. Use ideas where its always hard for Toppo or anyone to actually get what he wants. Keep readers on the brink of excitement and never make it too obvious for readers. Always give room for some twists in the story.
Your story holds immense potential, and the current plot is captivating. Here's hoping it evolves into a substantial narrative, transcending the clichés often found in similar works.
Love
I stumbled upon your story by chance, and I must say, it looks quite promising. I've just finished Chapter 3, and while I'm unsure of what lies ahead in the subsequent chapters, I'm filled with curiosity and excitement to discover more.
One aspect I truly appreciate about your storytelling is your slow and steady pace. Rather than rushing into explicit scenes, you're focusing on building the narrative—a crucial foundation. Till now story sounds quite realistic.
I hope the gradual development continues, the way you're doing. However, I do have a few suggestions, if you're open to them:
1. While I understand this is your story, I've always believed that erotica with a realistic approach have the potential to become epics. Remember, you're writing an erotica, not some porn video script. Take your time, and let intimacy unfold organically, avoiding illogical leaps just to satisfy certain readers' demands to see Shipra getting fucked.
2. Many inexperienced authors resort to clichés like taking the excuse of wife cheating on her husband or indulging in sex with some other guy on the pretext of her husband not sexually competent or weak at sex or may be things have turned boring in bed. Please don't take the same path in your story.
Its always more exciting when a couple is madly in love and are happy with each other, even in bed. Seducing a loyal, strong character woman is the ultimate challenge & fun rather than a woman who is easy and can be manipulated to have sex just because she is desperate.
3. I would suggest to stop sharing your future ideas of the story witn readers. Like I went through one of your comments where you confirm that Shipra has some hidden slut in her and also revealing about Shipra's ex bf a bit. Why do this ? It would simply take away the charm because most of the readers will have set their minds that Shipra has slutty character hidden in her.
This is directly attacking on her character which you are still building up. Once her character is soiled, nothing would be left in the story.
4. It's essential to maintain Shipra's integrity as a character. Please don't turn Shipra in some betraying slut who starts opening her legs easily in future. Surely, there would be sex episodes of her but they should happen with logic which makes sense and sounds realistic. If Shipra gets fucked once, doesn't mean she would open her legs easily next time for anyone. Never turn her into a slut character. Her character should still remain the same i.e hard to get. Hopefully you wouldn't take the route of blackmailing either as it would simply kill the buzz.
5. Looks like Toppo is looking for some revenge. Now its up to you if he actually gets the complete revenge or Shipra is smart enough to outwit him in his own game and never gets to lose her dignity completely even after getting fucked. Use ideas where its always hard for Toppo or anyone to actually get what he wants. Keep readers on the brink of excitement and never make it too obvious for readers. Always give room for some twists in the story.
Your story holds immense potential, and the current plot is captivating. Here's hoping it evolves into a substantial narrative, transcending the clichés often found in similar works.
Love
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