22-05-2024, 11:21 PM
The start was very good bro, but I feel like you are rushing the story.
Don't be in a hurry, so many angles crammed into a single chapter.
The story has lots of potential, take it scene by scene.
All in all very erotic update.
Don't be in a hurry, so many angles crammed into a single chapter.
The story has lots of potential, take it scene by scene.
All in all very erotic update.


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