04-05-2024, 10:28 PM
Hello my friend,
It was a nice composition of an interesting story.
I wish to give just one suggestion ahead.
I accept that a good story makes the readers involve into it much, which requires detailing in the story. Each and every aspect should be given in detail.
But I felt here that, you are giving too much of detail, which makes the readers either to loose interest or to do skip reading which I do.
Please don’t take it in a wrong way, it’s just my suggestion and the way I felt.
One final thing is, it would be better if you explain that Srini also finds the CCTV footage from the theatre too. Because it actually started at the theatre. It also explains what happened during the interval break, why she switched her seat back to her position, where was she and what was she doing for almost an hour after the movie ends.
I hope you had better plans to expose this.
Good work and keep rocking…
It was a nice composition of an interesting story.
I wish to give just one suggestion ahead.
I accept that a good story makes the readers involve into it much, which requires detailing in the story. Each and every aspect should be given in detail.
But I felt here that, you are giving too much of detail, which makes the readers either to loose interest or to do skip reading which I do.
Please don’t take it in a wrong way, it’s just my suggestion and the way I felt.
One final thing is, it would be better if you explain that Srini also finds the CCTV footage from the theatre too. Because it actually started at the theatre. It also explains what happened during the interval break, why she switched her seat back to her position, where was she and what was she doing for almost an hour after the movie ends.
I hope you had better plans to expose this.
Good work and keep rocking…