29-03-2024, 11:22 PM
Dear Krish thanks for writing this amazing story you have started though you have already mentioned in the beginning that it would be a short one, after reading the last update that is chapter 4 the following conclusion has drawn my attention which is appended below
Manav is a caring, loving husband, living peacefully with his beautiful wife Subha who slowly knowingly entered in the illicit relationship with his colleague Sethu ( let's say alpha male in this story).
2. Manav after knowing the truth still has less than 1% believe that he can win his wife back.
3. Manav knowingly enters the world of cuckold( but the term cuckold is still unknown to him)
4. Manav find about Sethu family and can use it as a weapon (let's see where the story unfolds later on)
Now coming back to point
Don' t try to make Manav an alpha character by banging Shilpa as an act of revenge or to prove his supremacy. Always remember there should be only one alpha male in the story and we all know who the hell he is. However Manav can play as a mere protagonist husband but there is a fine line between a bull and cuck. Don't ever make the character of Subha as a submissive sex slut, keep the love for her husband and lust for her lover ( a dutiful wife of Manav and a lover of Sethu). Try to build up double meaning conversation or situations in between Sethu and Subha keeping husband in doubt and despair.
The story will be more interesting when the husband plans to win his wife back every time but he fails and ended up being cuck (not because his planning is poor or he is cuck but there is someone along with Sethu holding his hand side by side helping her lover to win over her husband in every situation and enjoying her husband's failure and lover success )
Don't make the story full of sex , bang , gangbang, then it will be monotonous and become a porn story instead . You can add punches in the story like
An office get together where Sethu and Subha acts like newely wed couple and everyone complementing them.
An office tour/ vacation where Manav fails to attend and busy with his office meeting while Sethu is busy in mating.
Sethu comparing or joking manly matters with manav in front of his wife.
Suddenly Manav falls sick (for some reason or maybe Sethu is behind all of this) Subha taking good care of Manav, keeping all his needs taking care of husband all day (taking leave from the office) and taking care of Sethu behind the curtain at night. Manav knows there is no requirement for sethu, Subha is competent enough to care for him but why Sethu is staying in their flat under the same roof (taking care of subha at night and Manav is just the audience of their romance) and he is so weak to take any action against them.
And lastly don't make it a cheap cuckold story and agree with the reader Manikandrajesh
All these points are just from a readers point of view, I have no intention to dilute the ideas of the author (he is excellent in his field we all know)
Waiting for more updates....
Manav is a caring, loving husband, living peacefully with his beautiful wife Subha who slowly knowingly entered in the illicit relationship with his colleague Sethu ( let's say alpha male in this story).
2. Manav after knowing the truth still has less than 1% believe that he can win his wife back.
3. Manav knowingly enters the world of cuckold( but the term cuckold is still unknown to him)
4. Manav find about Sethu family and can use it as a weapon (let's see where the story unfolds later on)
Now coming back to point
Don' t try to make Manav an alpha character by banging Shilpa as an act of revenge or to prove his supremacy. Always remember there should be only one alpha male in the story and we all know who the hell he is. However Manav can play as a mere protagonist husband but there is a fine line between a bull and cuck. Don't ever make the character of Subha as a submissive sex slut, keep the love for her husband and lust for her lover ( a dutiful wife of Manav and a lover of Sethu). Try to build up double meaning conversation or situations in between Sethu and Subha keeping husband in doubt and despair.
The story will be more interesting when the husband plans to win his wife back every time but he fails and ended up being cuck (not because his planning is poor or he is cuck but there is someone along with Sethu holding his hand side by side helping her lover to win over her husband in every situation and enjoying her husband's failure and lover success )
Don't make the story full of sex , bang , gangbang, then it will be monotonous and become a porn story instead . You can add punches in the story like
An office get together where Sethu and Subha acts like newely wed couple and everyone complementing them.
An office tour/ vacation where Manav fails to attend and busy with his office meeting while Sethu is busy in mating.
Sethu comparing or joking manly matters with manav in front of his wife.
Suddenly Manav falls sick (for some reason or maybe Sethu is behind all of this) Subha taking good care of Manav, keeping all his needs taking care of husband all day (taking leave from the office) and taking care of Sethu behind the curtain at night. Manav knows there is no requirement for sethu, Subha is competent enough to care for him but why Sethu is staying in their flat under the same roof (taking care of subha at night and Manav is just the audience of their romance) and he is so weak to take any action against them.
And lastly don't make it a cheap cuckold story and agree with the reader Manikandrajesh
All these points are just from a readers point of view, I have no intention to dilute the ideas of the author (he is excellent in his field we all know)
Waiting for more updates....
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