16-03-2024, 07:00 AM
(15-03-2024, 12:44 PM)Zomato Wrote: The narration has so far been very good. The story should as realistic as possible. Shreya intention is not to degrade her sister in law. No self respecting person would stoop to the levels of licking the bum of a a stinking 70 year old man who has not bathed nor washed his bum for god know s how long. Shreya still adores her SIL. So please avoid such descriptions.
I know, but I tried to show what state of mind Rani was in trying to repent for her "sins". But she did get back to her senses later in the morning. I will keep you suggestion in mind. Thank you for helping the story improve