04-01-2024, 03:08 AM
(This post was last modified: 04-01-2024, 03:30 AM by critic_honest. Edited 1 time in total. Edited 1 time in total.)
Dear Author, I randomly just went through this story of yours.
I can see the story is still building up and is in its initial important stage where it either becomes a piece of art or total bullshit. I have a few suggestions if you're keen to accept.
1. Most stories here on Xossipy have that same centuries old plot, making it very pathetic and boring.
>Husband will be shown loving but quite weak in sex who climaxes too early in bed but his wife will have a very high sex libido thus, him keeping her physically unsatisfied all the time. [Thankfully you haven't shown Rohan like that which I just loved].
> Then, slowly the wife will demand more sex, which her husband obviously won't be able to provide and eventually she would start looking for other men and would soon get seduced easily by other guys around her and hence slowly turn into a whore character who doesn't even care of her husband anymore. Worse, wife & lover sometimes even start humiliating the husband. End of the story. Right ?
Honestly, this plot is so common and so pathetic. Please don't follow the same thing in your story as well.
Your plot is honestly looking promising till now.
but please don't add such boring plot where wife at home starts getting bored because her husband is busy in work all the time or goes out of station because of work thus making wife suffer alone at home who in turns gets bored and things start happening with servant out of boredom, curiosity and loneliness blaming her husband. Sounds Pathetic right?
2. Always remember you are writing a sex story and not writing some porn script where things happen illogically at very fast pace. Always make your plots & circumstances sound realistic. Making Tara fuck at each and every point should not be the objective.
3. Its always fun and exciting when wife and husband are madly in love and are happy with each other in every aspect of life including sex. Real excitement unfolds when, even if at this 'all good stage', things change & wife still gets slowly seduced somehow. Let's see how you do it [Will Rohan turn Cockold at some point in story? keeping my fingers crossed]
Seducing a Loyal, tuff and a strong character woman is an art in itself and far far more exciting than the woman who is already ready and desperate for attention of other men.
> Here although, we don't much know about personality of Tara but she looks like a perfect wife modern wife till now. Fingers cross how her personality turns out to be.
4. Work on the character of TARA. we're still unclear about her personality, her body type. May be slowly it would unfold.
Please don't ever turn TARA into some characterless cock hungry betraying slut woman who gets easily seduced by servant. Use logics in your story plot which are hard to question. Make the situations look realistic when you'll put the couple into [Thank god you did not make Golu enter the room making him watch Tara Naked or without clothes].
Circumstances should always look realistic. Avoid illogical sex scripts.
If TARA is displayed as a loyal, strong character and a loving wife then it would be always hard for Golu/People to get into her pants which is the real fun. This would create more interest in the story. Make her hard to get.
Even if she gets fucked by someone in some unavoidable situation, don't change her character in to some cheap whore which would make her easier to bed again. Maintain her dignity at all costs so that its always difficult to get her.
Don't ever snatch away the love and respect between a couple because that makes the woman vulnerable and easy to get.
{Don't be like -> Husband tries to convince wife to get fucked by someone. Wife in starting says no and then says yes for husband's happiness and then she starts enjoying and eventually becomes town whore.} It would be such a cliché.
3. Never be in a hurry to make TARA fuck by anyone. Always remember, the day Tara gets fucked, it would steal away some excitement for sure because that will make readers assume that, now Tara has become easy target to get. So take your time and build your story. Think it through and turn into a beautiful story. Small incidents should keep happening keeping us readers on edge which would slowly move towards its goal.
Otherwise it would be just like watching a porn which is useless.
4. Finally, I feel you should stop asking for advices from the readers for next part. It's your story and you are genuinely doing good, so go ahead with you thoughts. If you start following each and everyone here, you will ruin the story. Just go with the slow place. Don't be in a hurry to give steamy sex till its actually needed.
Always Remember, its an erotic story and not some cheap porn.
Also, the most important which often authors forget, please keep updating on time otherwise readers start losing interest and always try to come up to your promises of updates to maintain the trust.
I hope that helps. Your story is going really great.
Thanks
I can see the story is still building up and is in its initial important stage where it either becomes a piece of art or total bullshit. I have a few suggestions if you're keen to accept.
1. Most stories here on Xossipy have that same centuries old plot, making it very pathetic and boring.
>Husband will be shown loving but quite weak in sex who climaxes too early in bed but his wife will have a very high sex libido thus, him keeping her physically unsatisfied all the time. [Thankfully you haven't shown Rohan like that which I just loved].
> Then, slowly the wife will demand more sex, which her husband obviously won't be able to provide and eventually she would start looking for other men and would soon get seduced easily by other guys around her and hence slowly turn into a whore character who doesn't even care of her husband anymore. Worse, wife & lover sometimes even start humiliating the husband. End of the story. Right ?
Honestly, this plot is so common and so pathetic. Please don't follow the same thing in your story as well.
Your plot is honestly looking promising till now.
but please don't add such boring plot where wife at home starts getting bored because her husband is busy in work all the time or goes out of station because of work thus making wife suffer alone at home who in turns gets bored and things start happening with servant out of boredom, curiosity and loneliness blaming her husband. Sounds Pathetic right?
2. Always remember you are writing a sex story and not writing some porn script where things happen illogically at very fast pace. Always make your plots & circumstances sound realistic. Making Tara fuck at each and every point should not be the objective.
3. Its always fun and exciting when wife and husband are madly in love and are happy with each other in every aspect of life including sex. Real excitement unfolds when, even if at this 'all good stage', things change & wife still gets slowly seduced somehow. Let's see how you do it [Will Rohan turn Cockold at some point in story? keeping my fingers crossed]
Seducing a Loyal, tuff and a strong character woman is an art in itself and far far more exciting than the woman who is already ready and desperate for attention of other men.
> Here although, we don't much know about personality of Tara but she looks like a perfect wife modern wife till now. Fingers cross how her personality turns out to be.
4. Work on the character of TARA. we're still unclear about her personality, her body type. May be slowly it would unfold.
Please don't ever turn TARA into some characterless cock hungry betraying slut woman who gets easily seduced by servant. Use logics in your story plot which are hard to question. Make the situations look realistic when you'll put the couple into [Thank god you did not make Golu enter the room making him watch Tara Naked or without clothes].
Circumstances should always look realistic. Avoid illogical sex scripts.
If TARA is displayed as a loyal, strong character and a loving wife then it would be always hard for Golu/People to get into her pants which is the real fun. This would create more interest in the story. Make her hard to get.
Even if she gets fucked by someone in some unavoidable situation, don't change her character in to some cheap whore which would make her easier to bed again. Maintain her dignity at all costs so that its always difficult to get her.
Don't ever snatch away the love and respect between a couple because that makes the woman vulnerable and easy to get.
{Don't be like -> Husband tries to convince wife to get fucked by someone. Wife in starting says no and then says yes for husband's happiness and then she starts enjoying and eventually becomes town whore.} It would be such a cliché.
3. Never be in a hurry to make TARA fuck by anyone. Always remember, the day Tara gets fucked, it would steal away some excitement for sure because that will make readers assume that, now Tara has become easy target to get. So take your time and build your story. Think it through and turn into a beautiful story. Small incidents should keep happening keeping us readers on edge which would slowly move towards its goal.
Otherwise it would be just like watching a porn which is useless.
4. Finally, I feel you should stop asking for advices from the readers for next part. It's your story and you are genuinely doing good, so go ahead with you thoughts. If you start following each and everyone here, you will ruin the story. Just go with the slow place. Don't be in a hurry to give steamy sex till its actually needed.
Always Remember, its an erotic story and not some cheap porn.
Also, the most important which often authors forget, please keep updating on time otherwise readers start losing interest and always try to come up to your promises of updates to maintain the trust.
I hope that helps. Your story is going really great.
Thanks
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