03-01-2024, 11:37 PM
(This post was last modified: 03-01-2024, 11:48 PM by critic_honest. Edited 1 time in total. Edited 1 time in total.)
Dear Author, I randomly just went through this story of yours.
Since the story is still in build state, I have a few suggestions if you're keen to accept.
1. Most stories here on Xossipy have that same centuries old plot, making it very pathetic and boring.
Husband will be shown a weak character who is even bad at sex but the wife will have very high sex libido. Slowly the wife will demand more sex, which her husband won't be able to provide and eventually she will start looking for other men and will soon get seduced easily by other guys and hence will turn into whore character who doesn't care of her husband anymore. They sometimes even start humiliating the husband. End of the story. Right ?
Honestly, this plot is so common and so pathetic. Please don't follow the same thing in your story as well.
2. Always remember you are writing a sex story and not writing some porn script where things happen illogically and at very fast pace.
Its always fun and exciting when wife and husband madly love each other and they are happy with each other in every aspect of life may it be even sex. The fun begins even if at this stage things change & wife still gets seduced somehow. Seducing a tuff and strong character woman is far far more exciting than the one who we know, is already ready and always asking for attention by other men.
3. Work on the character of Padma. Don't ever turn Padma into some characterless woman who gets easily seduced. Use logics in your story plot or the situations you'll put the couple into. They should look realistic. Avoid illogical sex scripts.
If Padma is displayed as a loyal, strong character and a loving wife then it would be always hard for people to get her which is the real fun. This would create more interest in the story. Make her hard to get.
Even if she gets fucked by someone, don't change her character in to some whore like.
{Don't show it like -> Husband tries to convince wife to get fucked by someone. Wife in start says no and then says yes h for his happiness and then she starts enjoying and eventually becomes town whore.} It would be such a cliche.
3. We know you already revealed that her husband is a cuckold [I wish you wouldn't have done it so soon] but still don't be in such a hurry to make Padma fuck by anyone. take your time and build your story. Think it through and it will turn into a beautiful story.
Otherwise it would be just like watching a porn which is useless.
4. Finally, Stop asking for advices from the readers. It's your story, so go with you thoughts. If you start following each and everyone here, you will ruin the story. Just go with the slow place. Don't be in a hurry to give steamy sex till its actually needed.
Always Remember, its a erotic story.
Thanks
Since the story is still in build state, I have a few suggestions if you're keen to accept.
1. Most stories here on Xossipy have that same centuries old plot, making it very pathetic and boring.
Husband will be shown a weak character who is even bad at sex but the wife will have very high sex libido. Slowly the wife will demand more sex, which her husband won't be able to provide and eventually she will start looking for other men and will soon get seduced easily by other guys and hence will turn into whore character who doesn't care of her husband anymore. They sometimes even start humiliating the husband. End of the story. Right ?
Honestly, this plot is so common and so pathetic. Please don't follow the same thing in your story as well.
2. Always remember you are writing a sex story and not writing some porn script where things happen illogically and at very fast pace.
Its always fun and exciting when wife and husband madly love each other and they are happy with each other in every aspect of life may it be even sex. The fun begins even if at this stage things change & wife still gets seduced somehow. Seducing a tuff and strong character woman is far far more exciting than the one who we know, is already ready and always asking for attention by other men.
3. Work on the character of Padma. Don't ever turn Padma into some characterless woman who gets easily seduced. Use logics in your story plot or the situations you'll put the couple into. They should look realistic. Avoid illogical sex scripts.
If Padma is displayed as a loyal, strong character and a loving wife then it would be always hard for people to get her which is the real fun. This would create more interest in the story. Make her hard to get.
Even if she gets fucked by someone, don't change her character in to some whore like.
{Don't show it like -> Husband tries to convince wife to get fucked by someone. Wife in start says no and then says yes h for his happiness and then she starts enjoying and eventually becomes town whore.} It would be such a cliche.
3. We know you already revealed that her husband is a cuckold [I wish you wouldn't have done it so soon] but still don't be in such a hurry to make Padma fuck by anyone. take your time and build your story. Think it through and it will turn into a beautiful story.
Otherwise it would be just like watching a porn which is useless.
4. Finally, Stop asking for advices from the readers. It's your story, so go with you thoughts. If you start following each and everyone here, you will ruin the story. Just go with the slow place. Don't be in a hurry to give steamy sex till its actually needed.
Always Remember, its a erotic story.
Thanks
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