15-12-2023, 02:01 PM
Brilliant....
Bahut hi bhadiyaa....
Thoda emotional introspection add karo....
Sex scene ko detail. Me likhiye.....
Choti choti feelings wagerah ko detail mein bataye....
Likhte accha hai....
Thoda spellings per dhyan dijiye or
Dialogue form mein likho....
Lambi jaayegi story....
Agge ka intezaar hai....
Bahut hi bhadiyaa....
Thoda emotional introspection add karo....
Sex scene ko detail. Me likhiye.....
Choti choti feelings wagerah ko detail mein bataye....
Likhte accha hai....
Thoda spellings per dhyan dijiye or
Dialogue form mein likho....
Lambi jaayegi story....
Agge ka intezaar hai....