Incest ✨꧁ ⪻ எனக்கு கண்ணு தெரியாது ⪼ ꧂✨
(11-12-2023, 08:27 AM)king of x Wrote: இரண்டு பேரும்   பொட்டை  இல்லை நண்பா , ராஜு ஏற்கனவே அவன் அம்மா வயதுடைய ஆன்டியை கரெக்ட் செய்து கட்டிலில் ருத்ரதாண்டவம் ஆடிருப்பான் அது உங்களக்கு தெரிந்ததே , அப்ரோ எப்படி அவனை போட்ட என்று சொல்லுறீங்க ப்ரோ ...


இரண்டு பெரும் அதற்கான தக்க சமயத்தை எதிர்பார்த்துட்டு இருக்கிறார்கள் , ..நேரம் வரும் பொது கண்டிப்பாக நீங்க எதிர்பார்த்துக்கொண்டு இருப்பதை இரண்டு மகன்களும் நிறைவேற்றுவார்கள் ...அது வரை பொறுமை காக்கவும் ...கதையில் இன்னும் ஒரு சில முக்கிய கதாபாத்திரம் வர இருக்கு ..அதுவும் உங்களுக்கு பிடிக்கும என  நம்புகிறேன் ....
தொடர்ந்து படித்து விமிர்சித்ததற்கு ரொம்ப நன்றி  Namaskar

I'm eagerly waiting for lakshmi part patiently. I know as a writer you know how to move the story, But I would like to give my opinion on certain things. You said that more important characters are coming to the story for lakshmi. But I feel that the tailor and the boys still have a lot of potential to be revisited where finally the son sees his mom having hardcore sex somehow. At some point it would be good if you bring back these characters and at the same time bring the new important characters. And as a fan request putting Lakshmi in multiple gangbangs is worthy of her character. It would be nice if Lakshmi travels a lot with other characters well and then finally comes to her son since her character potential is huge and limiting her character to just son would be underwhelming.

And one of the main reason why your story is different and enjoyable than other stories is that you write the teasing part very well which is important to set the mood. A lot of stories fail to do that. Keeping that in mind if you could write teasing parts at the same level for all new characters for lakshmi it would be great

Note: These are my personal opinions.
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RE: ✨꧁ ⪻ எனக்கு கண்ணு தெரியாது ⪼ ꧂✨ - by shawblack - 12-12-2023, 12:08 AM



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