04-12-2023, 08:52 AM
What i like about your story is that your characters are well etched and the character development is believable.
Vikram is pure evil personified. He will go to any lengths to fulfill his wishes. He will manipulate and destroy people's lives as long as he gets what he wants. He will dump a pregnant Bhavani once he is done with her. He want to father a child but doesn't want to perform any of the duties associated with it.
Bhavani is slowly getting changed into a wanton slut. She now believes that she is not cheating her husband. She now has sympathy for him but slowly it will turn into disdain and hatred. Even if she gets dumped by Vikram, she will move on to another lover. She will carry Vikrams child eventually and will look down on her husband. She wont feel guilty about it.
Girija was Bhavani once upon a time. Somebody like Vikram eventually changed her into what she is today.
Mohan is a true blue gentleman and typical family man. He is the hero of this story. Needs to be seen how he ends up. One good thing author did is not to portray him as a cuckold or wannabe sissy. He is never going to accept that and eventually when he finds out, he will be heartbroken but will take revenge.
Lets see how this proceeds. Looking forward to next update.
Vikram is pure evil personified. He will go to any lengths to fulfill his wishes. He will manipulate and destroy people's lives as long as he gets what he wants. He will dump a pregnant Bhavani once he is done with her. He want to father a child but doesn't want to perform any of the duties associated with it.
Bhavani is slowly getting changed into a wanton slut. She now believes that she is not cheating her husband. She now has sympathy for him but slowly it will turn into disdain and hatred. Even if she gets dumped by Vikram, she will move on to another lover. She will carry Vikrams child eventually and will look down on her husband. She wont feel guilty about it.
Girija was Bhavani once upon a time. Somebody like Vikram eventually changed her into what she is today.
Mohan is a true blue gentleman and typical family man. He is the hero of this story. Needs to be seen how he ends up. One good thing author did is not to portray him as a cuckold or wannabe sissy. He is never going to accept that and eventually when he finds out, he will be heartbroken but will take revenge.
Lets see how this proceeds. Looking forward to next update.