20-11-2023, 08:45 PM
(20-11-2023, 08:02 PM)kuttoosan009 Wrote: Thanks for review and suggestions.
As I said before, I eliminated Rahim, he will never come back in this story. He was just a reason to divert Jayas life.
Manis father is also not a character.
Mani & Shekhar uncle will came later.
Now focusing on Reghu, because there is some flash back of Reghu and a chance of revenge.
The main male dominating character is on the way.
Jayas friend Ashima teacher also be a main part of this story.
May be I try to give a chance to the peon Rajesh also (not planned)
I was introduced Albert and Christeena to make negative impression in Jayas mind. Otherwise as a lovable wife she will felt guilty that she has cheating her husband.
Now she intentionally not do anything wrong. But if she do anything because of the situations , she will never felt sad. Because her husband already cheated her. He is living happy with other lady.
I will try to finish next update soon
you have amazing writing skills....
we all believe in your strength of writing erotica....
you potrayed Rahim so well that readers always look forward to have a chance of jaya and rahim....
its not bad if you make a return of rahim as he is the first love of Jaya and readers.....
rest you are the best.....