20-11-2023, 08:02 PM
(This post was last modified: 20-11-2023, 08:03 PM by kuttoosan009. Edited 1 time in total. Edited 1 time in total.)
(11-11-2023, 12:48 PM)Yampag Wrote: Hi, kuttoo bro..
Very sad to hear that you have lost two updates.. it's very painful for you as you are creating magic with your writing skill in this story.. we are loving JAYA.. a beautiful n sexy teacher.. a kind hearted lady.. indulging in kinky encounters with watchman, her student, old neighbour, Albert and may be now with Reghu..
The beauty of this story lies in the TRUST quality of every character.. Rahim opened up Jaya and reached till licking her pussy..
Mani enjoyed full her body at his n her will till aashole licking.. Shekhar uncle with little stamina.. Reghu having personal Instagram images till his Lund-dikhaai to Jaya..but all are characters of TRUST.. not disclosing outside to anybody and not forcing her or blackmailing her in any way.. that's what I like most in you story and yes till now no abusing or downgraded langauge used.. to downgrade the character of Jaya.. plz. Keep it up with this flavor..
Once again read this story from update 1 till Reghu.. what I personally not like are the episodes of Albert, Mahesh n Christeena.. otherwise everything I like in your story..
Few things are in my mind..
1 Mani left but he is the only person licked her asshole.. so in future he is the first person who enter in Jaya's asshole.. but how.. may be on his birthday or he got good result in exam and she offers her ass to Mani as reward..
2.Jaya recollecting but felt that she had not an exiting sex ventures in Suhaag raat or honeymoon.. but here she can explore it.. may be with Rahim, Mani or Reghu.. like role plays.. first to Marry anyone of them.. than Suhagraat then go to honeymoon with him for 3-4 days.. applying mahendi in hands with secretly mentioning the first letter of male person in her hand.. some erotic design oh her breast or around her clean shaven pussy of on her ass.. etc.
3.May be she and Rahim will go on honeymoon.. she book the tickets n hotel rooms n they meet in station.. in same compartment.. n then in the hotel room of destination behave n enjoy like married couple.. etc.
4.earlier also I thought about Mani's father . As he is paralyzed n his mother is having sex with Shekhar uncle.. but his fathe also have sex urge.. n somehow Jaya came into his contact and give pleasure to Mani's father..
Such are the things running in my mind so drafted here. . If you like anything and want to elaborate in you style.. you can.. it's your story and you have some thoughts to move further.. but once again I repeat.. I like the most is the Trust factors amin all characters and not back mailing by any character. ..
Keep it up bro.. see you soon here..
Thanks for review and suggestions.
As I said before, I eliminated Rahim, he will never come back in this story. He was just a reason to divert Jayas life.
Manis father is also not a character.
Mani & Shekhar uncle will came later.
Now focusing on Reghu, because there is some flash back of Reghu and a chance of revenge.
The main male dominating character is on the way.
Jayas friend Ashima teacher also be a main part of this story.
May be I try to give a chance to the peon Rajesh also (not planned)
I was introduced Albert and Christeena to make negative impression in Jayas mind. Otherwise as a lovable wife she will felt guilty that she has cheating her husband.
Now she intentionally not do anything wrong. But if she do anything because of the situations , she will never felt sad. Because her husband already cheated her. He is living happy with other lady.
I will try to finish next update soon