19-10-2023, 12:58 AM
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(19-10-2023, 12:39 AM)Therocksayys Wrote: Great update, but I think you have added so many characters. This story was supposed to be on Zeba and Pandit. Please try to focus more on only Zeba and Pandit at the start. More characters can come later.
In the first update you showed Zeba as very innocent and now she is watching all this and laughing doesn’t suit Zeba personality.
Pandit should try to get Zeba into his house again.
Please consider this.
Overall very great story.
Thanx friend , actually Uzma, aur Kallu wala episode shuru me itna bada nhi socha tha lekjn phir kahani banti chali gyi.But is episode ko ab yhi khtm kr dunga.
Basic idea was to seduce Zeba to some level.
NEXT WILL BE ABOUT ZEBA AND PANDIT l