19-10-2023, 12:39 AM
Great update, but I think you have added so many characters. This story was supposed to be on Zeba and Pandit. Please try to focus more on only Zeba and Pandit at the start. More characters can come later.
In the first update you showed Zeba as very innocent and now she is watching all this and laughing doesn’t suit Zeba personality.
Pandit should try to get Zeba into his house again.
Please consider this.
Overall very great story.
In the first update you showed Zeba as very innocent and now she is watching all this and laughing doesn’t suit Zeba personality.
Pandit should try to get Zeba into his house again.
Please consider this.
Overall very great story.