23-09-2023, 06:36 PM
(21-09-2023, 12:30 AM)bineeshm Wrote: THis is much more detailed and hotter than in the original Tamil version. bravo!Thank you, I have tried to make some changes as I go along. Sometimes going through it a second time helps to make some improvements
(21-09-2023, 01:07 AM)a2011 Wrote: Amazing update...now vikram has a shot of seducing bhavani right in front of poor mohan...He will make him suffer but not do it directly.
(21-09-2023, 11:01 AM)Givemeextra Wrote: At last, after some mindless fuck fest story coming back to coreThere has to be a number of sex scenes between Vikram and Bavani as that's the main gist of the story. There would be other developments in the story but not all as you mentioned above. Ultimately the story is about the slow degradation of a wife and possible redemption but not in the normal sense.
Would love to read [especially Bold one's]:
- Vikram coming to meet Smitha as her friend. Staying with her for hours agitating hubby badly. Hubby just clearing his mind but now again pain started. Hubby cant say anything at this point, his internal stress raising
- Vikram visiting more and more trips
- Bavani talking freely with Smitha but more with Vikram despite Hubby's objections
- Sexual tensions rising between Bavani and Smitha as well as to who can have more of Vikram
- Vikram fucking Smitha once and Bavani once [when either one of them there]
- Lastly Ultimately - Vikram having both Bavani and Smitha on 1 bed. Hubby trusting Smitha to be a distraction for Vikram but Smitha working with Bavani in reality to get fucked by Vikram. Some lesbian actions to needed
(22-09-2023, 04:33 AM)Lollobionda Wrote: Very well and fluently written, the description of the sex scenes detailed and vivid.Thank you for your detailed comment. As an author of the story I had taken some liberty to enhance the story. May not be always very logical though I try to keep some semblance of it as far as possible.
I enjoy every single line, because they are incredibly erotic...
If this was not an "erotic story", I would have described Banavi like this:
Immoral, naive, bratty and topped off with disrespect....
These are the behavioural codes of Bavani.
Maybe someone should whisper in Bavani's ear that marriage does not only consist of "vagina and penis".
There are many other weighty and significant things that make married life what it is.
She behaves like an immature 14 year old brat who has fallen head over heels in love with a boy of the
same age for the first time and gets an orgasm while briefly holding hands....
Bavani:
"I do not blow Mohan with that intensity.
When interacting with Mohan, I do not let myself go the way I do with Vikram..."
these and similar statements from her on one side, but on the other side:
"My man cannot satisfy me the way Vikram does..."
What a logic !
I cannot stand such persons who behave and act similarly to Vikram in life and also in stories.
Mostly they have failed in real life, have inferiority complexes, suffer strongly from narcism.
... And the naive, dick-driven wife and mother Banavi falls for such an impostor.
I fear that she will lose everything and end up with empty hands in the middle of nothing.
Unless Mohan does not drop her (after all she has done) and reaches under her arms....
In this sense
All the best
Lollobionda
(23-09-2023, 12:55 AM)Lollobionda Wrote: An appeal !Thank you very much for your effort in this regard. Comments are the encouragement that gives motivation to the author to keep going.
I think and feel that this story deserves much more attention from us "readers and friends of well-written erotica".
I think reading the story and enjoying it (getting excited) is good, but we should also share our views, opinions
and feelings about it too.
Therefore, I invite all readers and fans to take a few minutes to write down a few words and share them with us here.
But above all, to show the author that we appreciate and honour his work...
In this sense
All the best
Lollobionda
(23-09-2023, 04:18 AM)a2011 Wrote: This is the best story out here...Thank you for your kind words
(23-09-2023, 08:29 AM)Rangushki Wrote: Fantastic broThank you.
I'm in the midst of completing my story in Tamil. I think I will be able to complete it by tomorrow. After that I can fully concentrate on this story. I never let any of my story be incomplete. This is just to let you know of the situation.