28-08-2023, 02:58 PM
The story is superb and the narration is great but sometimes it feels like Riya is dumb and easy
You could have added half the sex scene in next part, I mean the scene where she greedly sucking . I felt like she is fully submitted to the minister like a slut
Again narration is really good but please don't move the story in a fast pace.
Pranitha Subhash is soo cute to portray as Riya
Just my thoughts I am not ruining your writing sense
Anyway good job waiting for the next update
You could have added half the sex scene in next part, I mean the scene where she greedly sucking . I felt like she is fully submitted to the minister like a slut
Again narration is really good but please don't move the story in a fast pace.
Pranitha Subhash is soo cute to portray as Riya
Just my thoughts I am not ruining your writing sense
Anyway good job waiting for the next update
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