Incest மகளின் மலராத மொட்டு.

[monor]

Your stories are generaly good. But this story is bit tiring because you seems to be trying a three way views of the same incidence. In visual mode like cinema it will be ok. But in reading...the repeat descriptions of the same incidence bit tiresome.atleast for me 
Take the story in regular mode. You can do it.

Dear friend, 

I welcome your opinion. 

All my stories are not like this. I tried a different scope in this story. Every character shows different kind  emotions and feelings for each action and reaction. I want to narrate each character emotions from the character side. I will complete the story like this. Sorry.