17-07-2023, 03:22 PM
Hi Rohini,
You are awesome writer and have good vocab and creativity.
However if you can take this as positive criticism then I would like to say that there are too frequent sex scenes. Out of 12- 8-9 have sex scene thats making your story too direct and repetitive.
Kindly make the illicit relation to grow between Zaid and Urvashi. Urvashi is main character but Paromita is getting too much space.
You are awesome writer and have good vocab and creativity.
However if you can take this as positive criticism then I would like to say that there are too frequent sex scenes. Out of 12- 8-9 have sex scene thats making your story too direct and repetitive.
Kindly make the illicit relation to grow between Zaid and Urvashi. Urvashi is main character but Paromita is getting too much space.
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