Adultery Bound by Storm: Urvashi's Journey into Forbidden

[amitdivyas940]

Hi Rohini,

Let me appreciate your story and the way you write it with all the details.

You are just fantastic. Specially the details during the sex scenes is too good and I can imagine it as if its happening next to me.

I am also one of the writers of the stories. and I love this theme of interfaith it just kicks me well.

Few suggestions, I feel too many back to back sex scenes. I feel you can work more on transformation of Urvashi from modern yet loyal wife. About her inner feeling, how zaid flicks lust in her, how the lust manipulates her to cross her marital boundaries.

Regarding Paromita's character again its too direct.. we can make her jealous and then slowly a competition between then for circumcised dick of Zaid..

You can ping me on G chat i can give more details amitdivyas940;