11-07-2023, 10:05 AM
(09-07-2023, 08:23 PM)Rajsvs Wrote: https://xossipy.com/thread-55966.html
Try this one
I have read your story it was good. The story/plot is good but it would be more erotic if you had described more about the wife (her assets) and built the story in slow mode. Instead the chapter one was like a brief I felt like its in detail. It would be more erotic and more good if you have taken time to convince wife and also elaborating the fuck sessions.
I gave my honest response please don't take it in a negative way.
Thank you