08-06-2023, 08:00 PM
(08-06-2023, 04:01 PM)adipop Wrote: Yah I have read the earlier comments asking you to write in english but you can do this let rasul's dialogues be in Hindi and once the dialogues end put english translation inside a bracket so that people who prefer English can understand because it looks a bit artificial when you have a low wage worker like rasul conversing in english kind of kills the theme of the story because over here you have a high class housewife getting her holes drilled by a low wage worker who is not her equal is social status so it needs to be crude not sanitised rasul who had to wait for years for his chance to have a go at purva in a real case scenario would turn purva into his own personal slut trying to put his mark on the woman once owned by his uncle and there will be nothing vanilla about there affair on the contrary it will be animalistic and brutal like rasul marking her as his whore and language goes a long way in establishing rasul's dominance over purva
Absolutely would love this approach