24-02-2023, 11:16 PM
(24-02-2023, 04:35 PM)Vihaan Wrote: Outstanding update as usual bhai
But...
Ye baat toh sahi hai ki yaha sb sex padhne aate hai or aap ki writing skills bhi achi hai but jaisa jasleen ka character apne develop kiya hai ushke according ye bilkul possible nhi hai ki jasleen ek baar me he sex kar le but anyways holi thi toh kuch toh hona he tha sex bilkul expect nhi kiya tha or woh bhi bhaang k nashe me pehle sex encounter toh pure hosh me hona chahiye esa mujhe lagta hai or na he apne koi oral sex dikhaya abhi k liye ye maan lete hai ki ramu pr hawas bhair thi qki uski maheenon ki mehnat aaj rang la rhi thi ishliye Or jasleen bhi bhang k nashe me thi so as a ice breaker ye sex acceptable hai but aage thoda oral sex bhi dalo unusual jagah pr or abhi jasleen thoda sa oppose kare esa nhi karna ki ishke baad wo ramu ko mann mani karne de seduction or slow built up me sex jada logical lagta hai ish sex scene ko apn situational maan lete hai ki holi Or bhaang sath ho tho ye toh hona he tha or meena ka character bohot sahi hai ushe jasleen ko ish sex ki wajah se guilt me nhi jane dena chahiye or aage or bhi sex ho jo aap fully describe kro or jasleen ko ab UP k desi rang me ramu puri tarah se slowly slowly change kre i hope ki ye story bohot lambi ho qki story bohot achi hai update kitne bhi bade ho bhai chota he lagta hai so update jaldi or bade dene ki koshish kro or I hope ki ye holi itni jaldi khatam na ho nahi ramu k liye or na he readers k liye
Waiting for Jasleen
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