13-02-2023, 01:28 PM
(This post was last modified: 13-02-2023, 01:29 PM by darkharse. Edited 1 time in total. Edited 1 time in total.)
Hi raja,
nice story line up its really erotic story no doubt..keep writing with nice updates.
but observed many mistakes in writing, leaving grammar mistakes you mentioned names also confusing calling imran as Pradeep, and also seen names such as Sameer, suma who are not characters at all in this story. Please try avoid this mistakes.
One more suggestion is story alignment is not proper please use correct text color (black or blue is fine), font size and proper left alignment.
once again thanks for very nice story please come up with erotic double penetration with lot of humiliation to Nithiya
...try to make her to play couple of games and activities which made readers happy n exited...waiting for update thanks 
nice story line up its really erotic story no doubt..keep writing with nice updates.
but observed many mistakes in writing, leaving grammar mistakes you mentioned names also confusing calling imran as Pradeep, and also seen names such as Sameer, suma who are not characters at all in this story. Please try avoid this mistakes.
One more suggestion is story alignment is not proper please use correct text color (black or blue is fine), font size and proper left alignment.
once again thanks for very nice story please come up with erotic double penetration with lot of humiliation to Nithiya
...try to make her to play couple of games and activities which made readers happy n exited...waiting for update thanks
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