18-01-2023, 07:16 AM
Dear author, first thanks for completing the story.
To be truthful, I am disappointed. Sorry to say that it looks like you have fucked up at the end.
It's not that the ending was surprising, it was absolutely on expected notes. What made my dissatisfaction greater is characterization. You have forced Meera to have a great elevation which could have been avoided without changing the end. Also you have degraded Desai on his intelligence by force. I think you wanted an easy passage to expose Desai in Meera's mind.
I am sorry, if it hurts you. I had actually viewed myself from Meera as well as Desai and couldn't agree with their actions and reactions.
You are a great writer and in my opinion, this could have been better. I think you are much influenced by the reader's comments. Always I preferred the writers to complete the writing ( in brief atleast) before posting the first chapter.
Anyway, thanks again for finishing.
Hope to see you again in short while.
To be truthful, I am disappointed. Sorry to say that it looks like you have fucked up at the end.
It's not that the ending was surprising, it was absolutely on expected notes. What made my dissatisfaction greater is characterization. You have forced Meera to have a great elevation which could have been avoided without changing the end. Also you have degraded Desai on his intelligence by force. I think you wanted an easy passage to expose Desai in Meera's mind.
I am sorry, if it hurts you. I had actually viewed myself from Meera as well as Desai and couldn't agree with their actions and reactions.
You are a great writer and in my opinion, this could have been better. I think you are much influenced by the reader's comments. Always I preferred the writers to complete the writing ( in brief atleast) before posting the first chapter.
Anyway, thanks again for finishing.
Hope to see you again in short while.
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