Adultery Knowing My Wife, Knowing Me As Well - part III

[The Last samurai]

@ author Krish


I thought to retire but felt obligated to pen down following. This is a critic reviews for the writer only and fellow readers are requested not to waste time.
 
I had great regards on your capabilities of story telling. I am totally disappointed with the last episode. For me you have merrily and cheaply submitted to the demands from the readers without bothering to characterization. You fixed your aim to  satisfy the readers totally ignoring the normal characters behaviour.
 
I agree with the fact that you may have decided to the end situation and characters needed to act accordingly to reach the goal. My objection is the path you have chosen. You have forced the characters in most unbecoming fashion to behave so that you reach the goal. It’s so silly!
 
I never expected such pathetic penship from a powerful writer in you. You put yourself in Krish’s position and review the behaviours of Krish. Similarly, you do same with Meera character. You will understand the flaws and hopefully will appreciate the character aberration.
 
I can only compare with following example. It appears that in your characterization a tiger is made to eat grass and a cow is eating flesh. I don’t think you are in a position to correct the flaws. The flaws will continue to make the tiger a household pet animal and cow as wild animal roaming in the forest.
 
Look at the flaws in characterization in last episode.


Krish

You have created Krish as a loving husband with cuckold tendency. From a long time Krish is worried with changed relationship between Meera and Desai. He trying to figure out the depths of the relationship. He has no problem to share her physically but great no to attachment.

On sensing the fear, he wants to reclaim Meera back. He wants Desai to leave. What should be the psychological conditions of the husband? He has gone through the recording which reveals the truth of his doubts. Nothing was encouraging for him. Clearly, he sensed that Desai wants Meera completely and playing mind game. Meera is also inclined. He has also observed the level of intimacy between them. Only possibility for Krish should be Psychologically depressed. Cuckold thinking can never arise in his mind. How can anybody get psychological pleasure out of cuckoldry when his mind is filled with threats of loosing wife whom he loves?
 
So, when Meera revealed her intentions of spending night with Krish, he should feel happy. He should be relieved a bit at least. But we see Krish proposing Meera for a live show. This is ridiculous! This is impossible.

Next great aberration is his witnessing live show. He has just been betrayed by friend. The betray is very grave in nature. He has just been rejected by his wife whom he loves. Under such situations, any person is transfixed. He is pained tremendously.  He looses his mental balance.  It’s a great shock.  Only two types of behaviours are possible. Either behave violently or collapse psychologically. But can never witness the sexual union of your wife with cool brain. It’s  impossible. Krish should have walked out much before. Author Krish, you forced Krish to witnesses to fulfill the demand of readers.

Are you listening Krish? You forced your character to act impossible things.


Meera
 
Meera may be a manipulator. She had fixed her goal for a better life with Desai by leaving Krish. Or Meera may be a loving wife contemplating revenge against Desai. Even Meera may be disgusted wife angry with Krish’s cuckold behaviour seeking rerevenge against Krish. Or worst case a desperate nymphomaniac wife seeking only sexual satisfaction with different men. In whatever form you want to picture her is your liberty. It’s fine.
 
Let’s see Meera’s  behaviour in last episode. She has been called a whore by her husband. Even she knows very well that she behaved like a whore many times. Still, when you are reminded the truth, you feel bad. When the source is a person you know loves you, the pain is more. Obviously, she is greatly offended. She is clueless to defend as she knows that the statement is true. What ever be the reason for her whoreship, she can’t deny the truth. What could be her reaction?
 
It could violent to oppose or collapse psychologically. In second case, she in most likelyhood should   search for isolation. She needs to be with herself to regain composure from shock. She goes for introspection.
 
I felt good as Meera isolated herself behind door. She refused to open door to Krish. Absolutely ok. Next, Desai knocked and Meera opened the door immediately.

 Why author Krish? Why? Why character Meera was forced to open the door immediately? You forced Meera so that you can create an opportunity to show case a live show as per demand of the readers.
 
Throughout the story, you conveniently forced characters to play as per your wish so that you can misuse. Very conveniently, you made Meera to confess Ashish encounter but forced her to hide Jay incident to certain level without any sensible reason. Earlier you made Meera to reveal all truth wherever Krish was involved. With Desai, i accept her reasons for maintaining secrecy. For Jay incident, you forced Meera to hide against her characterization. Can you please state any sensible reason for her to hide the fact? You forced her creating self hating sensivity over the incident in such a way that she  withdrew information from Krish. She was involved in much more bizarre incidents, but never felt self hating, while disclosing to Krish.  
 
The list is endleless. Many readers have pointed out them at different times. You have never bothered to minimise.


I am sorry to state above. But I felt you must know your weakness in appropriate characterization. You have successfully killed the characters.
 
 
 
 

 I think readers should have patience and wait for author to complete the last part. We have seen many turns and twists in this part so why not wait untill author give his final say. 
Somebody told Krish last visit was on 27th dec. This site will show login last visit if we log in only . For reading comments login not necessary. So he can read comments at any time. So hope everyone posted their opinion many time may be now let us allow author to have final say. 
Author might deny fact that his story is not influenced by comments but it definitely is so allow author to have his final word