Adultery নিখোঁজপুরের পতিতাপুত্র - আকাশ রায় (স্থগিত)

[Mehndi]

excellent writing...sobai jokhun bolche, amio aki kotha bolbo...you have a definite flair for writing...ami last 15 plus years dhore messageboard a achi...Hotboard,masalaboard,etc perye last a akhun xossipy....valo lekhoker somkha kom...you are one of the very few....
Just to give you two suggestions : one, aktu mul golpo theke protita porbo alada hoa jacche...continuity r ovab....ami bojhate parlam kina janina...mayer blouse a birjo makhale,ma chan korchilo...tarpor ki holo ? Khap ponchayete ma ke nye alochona hocchilo...sekhan theke golpo ta suru hoa....proti ta alada update a ,alada alada ghotona ghotlo....bicchino hoa jache amar mote...aktu continuity maintain koro please
second point...main je protagonist,mane ma r character ta...takei akhuno sevabe anoni,ebong tar rup er details description daoni....master er lungi,pandit er dhuti sobi holo...ma r bornona koi ?? ma ki choto choto blouse pore ? nabhir niche saree pore sorir dekhay gramer lokke ? keno tar sombondhe ai dharona gramer loker...se ki sudu tar boro boro dab er janne....kothay jano khapchhara hoa jacche ...flow ta harye jacche proti episode/update er continuity plus ma ugro joubon dekhe gramer lokeder heat khawa ebong kichu purono ghotona theke golpo ta ke egiye nye jete hobe biswas jogyota rakhar janne....arekta pinuram , sohom,baban, lekhok, bumba etc hote gele , ai point gulo kheyal rakte hobe....you are doing well, you have to be better in my opinion !