22-07-2022, 10:29 PM
(22-07-2022, 11:33 AM)Sambit07 Wrote: Sayad me story accha nahi likh raha iss liye mujhe jada reactions nehni milta jald he ye story khatam kar dunga 2 updates me fast forward karke
Bhai ap story to achi likh rh ho par ap ne jo nukar ka kirdar hai woh sai nai jo muje lag rh hai dono bhen ko nakur se shadi chalo bhua ki karwadi par itna neecha nai jao ke story me maza e nai aye. Story me tora twist le kar ao. Jase Tarun company ko apna karna chata ho ap raj choti maa ko apna kar sake. Mtlb ab woh dusre city ja rh hai to wahn dono khul kar enjoy kar study ke sath sath or jab usko pta chale to woh wapis aye or company ko take over na ke tarun. Baki ap samjdar ho.
Story both achi par platform tora change karo.
Zabardast likh rh ho ap.