19-04-2022, 02:00 AM
Very hot story. Very well written without any lose ends. All characters have their role in story. Plot is very exciting too.
About the end of story, this is certainly a different kind of end. It seems very realistic end though. All good people are died and bad are still alive but living a cursed life.
I must say this end is not for all. I love your end of story but somewhere I feel when we read erotica we want to end it with happy note. If you don't have any problem, I would like to write a short alternative end of this story. Just for those fools (like me) who wants to end story on happy note.
Isse pahle ki papa ji Kaushal ko rok pate vo vahan se nikal jata hai. Nikalne se pahle Neha ki aur dekhna bhi use jayaj nahi laga.
Neha vahi baith jaati hai sir pakad leti hai, use maaloom hai ki uski shaadi ab khatam ho chuki hai.
Papa ji: Neha tumhe kuchh bhi karke Kaushal ko mummyji se batane se rokna hoga. Use call karo.
Neha ko bahut gussa aata hai, ek aur meri shadi or jeevan barbaad ho gaya aur papa ji ko keval apni padi hai. Papa ji se aur ummeed bhi kya kar sakte hain. Neha ko kuchh samajh nahi aata kya kare. Vo apne kapde pahan kar bahar nikalti hai. Papa ji bhi saath aate hain.
Ghar pahunch kar Neha dekhti hai ki Kaushal ghar nahi aaya hai. Use thoda chinta hoti hai. Jaise jaise samay beetta jata hai uski chinta badhti jaati hai. Vo papa ji se security officer ke paas chalne ko kahti hai. Papa ji subah par taal dete hain. Dono sari raat pareshan the. Neha ko Kaushal ki chinta thi to Papa ji ko apne samajic pratishtha ki.
Subah Neha ka sabr ka baandh toot jata hai aur vo khud is security officer station jane ka faisla leti hai. Tabhi uske mobile par message aata hai, Kaushal use inform karta hai ki vo ab ghar chhod kar ja chuka hai. Vo ab us ghar me apne papa or wife ke saath nahi rah sakta.
Idhar Komal to man pareshan hai ki kyon uski maa ko seedhiyan chadh kar upar jana pada. Vo us kamre me jati hai. Vahan use papa ji pant milti hai, jiski jeb me Neha ki panty rakhi thi. Use dekhar use samajh aa jata hai ki ye Naha ki hai. Vo andar se toot jaati hai. Uska man apne papa aur Neha ke liye nafrat se bhar jata hai.
Kaushal ka haal din b din kharab hota jata hai. Vo depression ki aur badh jata hai. Aise samay me use ek din Komal ka call aata hai. Vo use ghar par bulati hai. Komal, Kaushal ko Neha aur uske papa ke bare me batati hai. Kaushal ke liye ye ek aur sadma tha. Us din Komal or Kaushal dono saath me apni kismat par rote hain. Iske saath dono ke beech kuchh najdeekiyan badhne lagti hain. Kaushal ko sex kiye 1 mahine ke upar ho gaya tha aur uska to pyar se bharosa hi khatam ho gaya tha. Kaushal apne liye Komal ki aankhon me pyar dekhta hai. Aaj use kai dino baad kisi ne pyar se dekha tha. Doobte ko tinke ka sahara aur vo us raat Komal ki bahon me so jata hai. Komal pahli baar kisi mard ko apne itne paas pati hai aur vo dheere dheere garam hone lagti hai. Komal se raha nahi jata aur vo Kaushal ko kiss kar deti hai. Kaushal jaag jata hai aur vo bhi Komal ka saath dene lagta hai. Dono us raat ek doosre se toot kar pyar karte hain.
Agli subah Kaushal office chala jata hai. Aaj vo kai dino baad office gaya tha. Idhar Komal, Mausa ji se revenge leti hai. Vo apne papa ko apna aur Kaushal ka video bhejti hai. Mausa ji gusse se aag baboola ho jate hain. Unhe samjh nahi aata kaise kal ka chhokra unke beti se ishk lada raha hai, jiski bivi unka bistar garm karti hai. Komal aur Mausa ji ki teekhi bahas hoti hai aur Mausa ji khud hi bol dete hain ki vo Neha ko chodte aaye hain. Komal apne papa to dhamki deti hai ki vo yadi Kaushal aur uske beech aaye to vo saare raaj khol degi. Mausa ji kuchh nahi kar pate. Komal apne papa se badla to le leti hai lekin use shanti nahi mil pati. Balki uska man aur pareshan ho jata hai. Use lagta hai ki usne Kaushal ka use kiya hai apne revenge ke liye.
Idhar Neha aur papa ji bhi sex kiye 1 mahina ho gaya tha. Aakhir ek din jab mummyji ghar par nahi thi to Neha to pakad lete hain. Neha bhi pichhle ek mahine se bahut pareshan thi, use lagta hai ki shaayad sex se uska kuchh dard door ho jaye. Vo dono ek wild sex karte hain. Sex wild tha, aaj kisi ke pakde jaane ka dar bhi nahi tha. Vo koi position nahi thi jo unhone na try ki ho. Sex ke baad Neha ko vishwas tha ki uska tension kuchh kam ho jayega lekin aisa hua nahi. Aaj use kuchh kami lag rahi thi. Aajtak har avaidh sambhandho ke baad vo Kaushal se sambhandh banati thi jo use vishwas dilata tha ki Kaushal hamesha use yon hi pyar karta rahega. Aaj koi nahi tha jo use bahon me leta chane phir vo kaisi bhi halat me ho.
Komal aur Kaushal ki najdeekiyan badhne lagti hain. Kaushal uljhan me tha ki vo apne wife ki bahan ke saath najayaj sambhandho me hai. Lekin phir uske achche sanskaron se use mila bhi kya. Dhokha
Komal ka man pareshan tha use maaloom tha ki usene Kaushal ka use kiya hai apne papa se badla lene ke liye. Vo faisla karti hai ki Kaushal ko sab kuchh bata degi. Lekin batane se pahle vo decide karti hai ki ek baar Kaushal ke saath rat bhar pyar karegi. Vo Kaushal ko phir ghar par invite karti hai aur Neha vale room me le jati hai. Mausa ji jab Kaushal ko dekhte hain to vo chupke se Neha ko bula lete hain. Us raat jab Komal aur Kaushal ek doosre se jee bhar kar pyar kate hain to Mausa ji Neha ko sab kuchh dikha dete hain. Neha ne kabhi nahi socha tha ki Kaushal uske saath aisa karega. Usse bahut gussa aata hai lekin phir vo apne baare me sochti hai. Usne bhi to vahi kiya, balki usse bhi badtar. Neha dekhti hai ki Komal or Kaushal ke pyar me koi wild sex nahi tha. Ye ek plain old missionary sex hi tha lekin dono ek doosre me bilkul khoye hue the. Unhe ek doosre ke badan se apni bhookh nahi mitani thi balki vo to doosre ko poora sukh dene ki koshish kar rahe the. Typical Kaushal jahan vo apne partner to kisi princess ki tarah pyar karta hai. Yahi vo pyar tha jisse Neha ko jyada problem thi. Vo bardasht nahi kar sakti thi ki Kaushal kisi ko emotionally itna pyar kare. Vo pyar keval uska tha par vo kabhi uski keemat hi nahi samajh payi.
Idhar Neha inhi khayalon me khoyi thi ki Mausa ji apni pant utar dete hain. Vo ab dheere dheere Naha ko bhi nanga karne legte hain. Neha ka man bilkul nahi tha lekin Muasa ji maanne vale nahi the. Vo Neha ke saath jabardasti karna shuru kar dete hain. Unhe aaj apne mardangi sabit karni thi. Kaise vo Kaushal se jyada alpha hain. Mausa ji Neha ki koi parvah nahi karte aur use jamkar chodte hain. Neha ko lagta hai jaise uske saath r*p* hua hai. Neha ka man hi sex se khatam ho jata hai. Vo bas ek baar Kaushal ke pyar ke liye tadap jati hai. Koi ek baar phir use princess ki tarah pyar kare. Koi ek baar phir usse toot kar pyar kare.
Ghar par to haal aur bura tha. Papa ji ki sex ki demand badhti jaa rahi thi. Unhe hamesha sex me kuchh naya chahiye tha. Nayepan ka ek hi matlab tha ki Neha ko aur jyada degrade kiya jaana. Vo Neha ko kisi sex doll se jyada kuchh samjhte bhi nahi the. Vo uske saath kuch samay se BDSM kar rahe the. Din par din Neha ki jindgi badtar ho rahi thi. Neha sochti hai ki is jeevan ka ab koi phayda nahi. Vo apne ko khatam karne ka phaisla leti hai. Vo jaane se pahle ek baar Kaushal ko door se dekhne ka sochti hai. Jab vo Kaushal ke ghar ke paas aati hai to use Komal dikh jaati hai. Neha ka man bhar aata hai vo Kaushal se bina mile jaane lagti hai tabhi vo dekhti hai ki Komal ke saath koi ladka hai, lekin ye Kaushal nahi hai. Vo dono kisi premi premika ki tarah behave kar rahe the. Neha gusse se tilmila uthti hai. Use bardasht nahi hota ki koi Kaushal se dhokha kare. Haan usne bhi Kaushal ko dhokha diya tha lekin agar koi aur Kaushal ka bura kare to vo dekh nahi sakti thi. Vo Komal se poochne ka faisla karti hai.
Agle din Neha Komal ke ghar jaati hai aur usse sachchai batane ko bolti hai. Komal pahle to usse bilkul bhi baat nahi karti lekin jab vo Neha ki pareshani dekhti hai to use bata deti hai. Vo batati hai ki vo Kaushal ko sach bata chuki hai ki usne kis tarah uska use kiya. Lekin jo lamhe usne Kaushal ke saath bitaye the vo uske jeevan ke sabse achhe pal the. Kaushal ne jeevan me isse kai bade dhoke khaye hain vo ye bhi sah leta hai aur Komal to uske boyfriend ke saath ghar bulata hai. Vahi Neha ne un dono ko dekha tha.
Neha ko yah sunkar chain milta hai. jab vo jaane lagti hai to Komal usse poochh leti hai "Kya tum aaj bhe Kaushal se pyar karti ho". Komal ke paas iska koi javab nahi tha. Komal use ek baar Kaushal se milne ko bolti hai. Neha bhi sochti hai ki ek baar use Kaushal se milkar batana chahiye ki kaise uske Mausa ji aur sasur ji ne uska emotionally fayda uthaya. Vo Kaushal ke ghar ki or chal padti hai. Kaushal jab Neha ko dekhta hai to use yakeen nahi hota. Aaj usne kareeb do mahinon baad apne pyar ko dekha tha. Neha ka chehra ab pahle jaisa fresh nahi tha, Uspar kuchh nishan the jo batate hain ki kis tarah uske sasur roj uske saath sex karte hain. Par Kaushal ko un nishano se fark nahi padta hai vo Neha se aaj bhi usi tarah pyar karta hai. Isse pahle ki Neha kuchh bol pati, Kaushal use apne aur Komal ke sambandho ke baare me batane lagta hai. Vo poori sachhai se sab kuch Neha ko batata hai. Lekin mafi nahi mangta, shayad uski jaroorat nahi thi. Dono ne jeevan me galtiyan ki thi aur avaidh sambhandh banaye the. Neha bhi Kaushal ko apna haal batati hai. Kis tarah papa ji roj uske saath BDSM karte hain. Kaushal gusse se bhar jata hai. Neha Kaushal se kahti hai ko vo ek baar keval ek baar Kaushal ko pyar karna chahti hai. Use ek arsa ho gaya hai sachcha pyar kiye. Kaushal aur Neha ek doosre ko kiss karte hain. Isse pahle ki Kaushal aage badhta Neha usse kahti hai ki "Yahan nahi, come home and win me back". Kaushal us shaam ghar aata hai. Mummy ji ghar par nahi thin. Papa ji BDSM ki taiyari kar rahe the. Jab vo Kaushal ko dekhte hain to gussa ho jaate hain. Vo Neha ko jabardasti apni aur kheenchte hain. Lekin Kaushal unka haath pakad leta hai. Vo papa ji ko ek thappad mar deta hai. Papa ji apni aukat samajh jate hain. Neha apne sasus par thook deti hai aur phir apne bedroom ko or chal deti hai. Kaushal aur Neha aaj toot kar pyar karte hain.
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I am not an erotica writer so I know it would be just a mediocre attempt.
Just would like to let everybody know original story ended as writer has informed. This attempt is not to change that but its just for those who wants to end story on happy note.
About the end of story, this is certainly a different kind of end. It seems very realistic end though. All good people are died and bad are still alive but living a cursed life.
I must say this end is not for all. I love your end of story but somewhere I feel when we read erotica we want to end it with happy note. If you don't have any problem, I would like to write a short alternative end of this story. Just for those fools (like me) who wants to end story on happy note.
Isse pahle ki papa ji Kaushal ko rok pate vo vahan se nikal jata hai. Nikalne se pahle Neha ki aur dekhna bhi use jayaj nahi laga.
Neha vahi baith jaati hai sir pakad leti hai, use maaloom hai ki uski shaadi ab khatam ho chuki hai.
Papa ji: Neha tumhe kuchh bhi karke Kaushal ko mummyji se batane se rokna hoga. Use call karo.
Neha ko bahut gussa aata hai, ek aur meri shadi or jeevan barbaad ho gaya aur papa ji ko keval apni padi hai. Papa ji se aur ummeed bhi kya kar sakte hain. Neha ko kuchh samajh nahi aata kya kare. Vo apne kapde pahan kar bahar nikalti hai. Papa ji bhi saath aate hain.
Ghar pahunch kar Neha dekhti hai ki Kaushal ghar nahi aaya hai. Use thoda chinta hoti hai. Jaise jaise samay beetta jata hai uski chinta badhti jaati hai. Vo papa ji se security officer ke paas chalne ko kahti hai. Papa ji subah par taal dete hain. Dono sari raat pareshan the. Neha ko Kaushal ki chinta thi to Papa ji ko apne samajic pratishtha ki.
Subah Neha ka sabr ka baandh toot jata hai aur vo khud is security officer station jane ka faisla leti hai. Tabhi uske mobile par message aata hai, Kaushal use inform karta hai ki vo ab ghar chhod kar ja chuka hai. Vo ab us ghar me apne papa or wife ke saath nahi rah sakta.
Idhar Komal to man pareshan hai ki kyon uski maa ko seedhiyan chadh kar upar jana pada. Vo us kamre me jati hai. Vahan use papa ji pant milti hai, jiski jeb me Neha ki panty rakhi thi. Use dekhar use samajh aa jata hai ki ye Naha ki hai. Vo andar se toot jaati hai. Uska man apne papa aur Neha ke liye nafrat se bhar jata hai.
Kaushal ka haal din b din kharab hota jata hai. Vo depression ki aur badh jata hai. Aise samay me use ek din Komal ka call aata hai. Vo use ghar par bulati hai. Komal, Kaushal ko Neha aur uske papa ke bare me batati hai. Kaushal ke liye ye ek aur sadma tha. Us din Komal or Kaushal dono saath me apni kismat par rote hain. Iske saath dono ke beech kuchh najdeekiyan badhne lagti hain. Kaushal ko sex kiye 1 mahine ke upar ho gaya tha aur uska to pyar se bharosa hi khatam ho gaya tha. Kaushal apne liye Komal ki aankhon me pyar dekhta hai. Aaj use kai dino baad kisi ne pyar se dekha tha. Doobte ko tinke ka sahara aur vo us raat Komal ki bahon me so jata hai. Komal pahli baar kisi mard ko apne itne paas pati hai aur vo dheere dheere garam hone lagti hai. Komal se raha nahi jata aur vo Kaushal ko kiss kar deti hai. Kaushal jaag jata hai aur vo bhi Komal ka saath dene lagta hai. Dono us raat ek doosre se toot kar pyar karte hain.
Agli subah Kaushal office chala jata hai. Aaj vo kai dino baad office gaya tha. Idhar Komal, Mausa ji se revenge leti hai. Vo apne papa ko apna aur Kaushal ka video bhejti hai. Mausa ji gusse se aag baboola ho jate hain. Unhe samjh nahi aata kaise kal ka chhokra unke beti se ishk lada raha hai, jiski bivi unka bistar garm karti hai. Komal aur Mausa ji ki teekhi bahas hoti hai aur Mausa ji khud hi bol dete hain ki vo Neha ko chodte aaye hain. Komal apne papa to dhamki deti hai ki vo yadi Kaushal aur uske beech aaye to vo saare raaj khol degi. Mausa ji kuchh nahi kar pate. Komal apne papa se badla to le leti hai lekin use shanti nahi mil pati. Balki uska man aur pareshan ho jata hai. Use lagta hai ki usne Kaushal ka use kiya hai apne revenge ke liye.
Idhar Neha aur papa ji bhi sex kiye 1 mahina ho gaya tha. Aakhir ek din jab mummyji ghar par nahi thi to Neha to pakad lete hain. Neha bhi pichhle ek mahine se bahut pareshan thi, use lagta hai ki shaayad sex se uska kuchh dard door ho jaye. Vo dono ek wild sex karte hain. Sex wild tha, aaj kisi ke pakde jaane ka dar bhi nahi tha. Vo koi position nahi thi jo unhone na try ki ho. Sex ke baad Neha ko vishwas tha ki uska tension kuchh kam ho jayega lekin aisa hua nahi. Aaj use kuchh kami lag rahi thi. Aajtak har avaidh sambhandho ke baad vo Kaushal se sambhandh banati thi jo use vishwas dilata tha ki Kaushal hamesha use yon hi pyar karta rahega. Aaj koi nahi tha jo use bahon me leta chane phir vo kaisi bhi halat me ho.
Komal aur Kaushal ki najdeekiyan badhne lagti hain. Kaushal uljhan me tha ki vo apne wife ki bahan ke saath najayaj sambhandho me hai. Lekin phir uske achche sanskaron se use mila bhi kya. Dhokha
Komal ka man pareshan tha use maaloom tha ki usene Kaushal ka use kiya hai apne papa se badla lene ke liye. Vo faisla karti hai ki Kaushal ko sab kuchh bata degi. Lekin batane se pahle vo decide karti hai ki ek baar Kaushal ke saath rat bhar pyar karegi. Vo Kaushal ko phir ghar par invite karti hai aur Neha vale room me le jati hai. Mausa ji jab Kaushal ko dekhte hain to vo chupke se Neha ko bula lete hain. Us raat jab Komal aur Kaushal ek doosre se jee bhar kar pyar kate hain to Mausa ji Neha ko sab kuchh dikha dete hain. Neha ne kabhi nahi socha tha ki Kaushal uske saath aisa karega. Usse bahut gussa aata hai lekin phir vo apne baare me sochti hai. Usne bhi to vahi kiya, balki usse bhi badtar. Neha dekhti hai ki Komal or Kaushal ke pyar me koi wild sex nahi tha. Ye ek plain old missionary sex hi tha lekin dono ek doosre me bilkul khoye hue the. Unhe ek doosre ke badan se apni bhookh nahi mitani thi balki vo to doosre ko poora sukh dene ki koshish kar rahe the. Typical Kaushal jahan vo apne partner to kisi princess ki tarah pyar karta hai. Yahi vo pyar tha jisse Neha ko jyada problem thi. Vo bardasht nahi kar sakti thi ki Kaushal kisi ko emotionally itna pyar kare. Vo pyar keval uska tha par vo kabhi uski keemat hi nahi samajh payi.
Idhar Neha inhi khayalon me khoyi thi ki Mausa ji apni pant utar dete hain. Vo ab dheere dheere Naha ko bhi nanga karne legte hain. Neha ka man bilkul nahi tha lekin Muasa ji maanne vale nahi the. Vo Neha ke saath jabardasti karna shuru kar dete hain. Unhe aaj apne mardangi sabit karni thi. Kaise vo Kaushal se jyada alpha hain. Mausa ji Neha ki koi parvah nahi karte aur use jamkar chodte hain. Neha ko lagta hai jaise uske saath r*p* hua hai. Neha ka man hi sex se khatam ho jata hai. Vo bas ek baar Kaushal ke pyar ke liye tadap jati hai. Koi ek baar phir use princess ki tarah pyar kare. Koi ek baar phir usse toot kar pyar kare.
Ghar par to haal aur bura tha. Papa ji ki sex ki demand badhti jaa rahi thi. Unhe hamesha sex me kuchh naya chahiye tha. Nayepan ka ek hi matlab tha ki Neha ko aur jyada degrade kiya jaana. Vo Neha ko kisi sex doll se jyada kuchh samjhte bhi nahi the. Vo uske saath kuch samay se BDSM kar rahe the. Din par din Neha ki jindgi badtar ho rahi thi. Neha sochti hai ki is jeevan ka ab koi phayda nahi. Vo apne ko khatam karne ka phaisla leti hai. Vo jaane se pahle ek baar Kaushal ko door se dekhne ka sochti hai. Jab vo Kaushal ke ghar ke paas aati hai to use Komal dikh jaati hai. Neha ka man bhar aata hai vo Kaushal se bina mile jaane lagti hai tabhi vo dekhti hai ki Komal ke saath koi ladka hai, lekin ye Kaushal nahi hai. Vo dono kisi premi premika ki tarah behave kar rahe the. Neha gusse se tilmila uthti hai. Use bardasht nahi hota ki koi Kaushal se dhokha kare. Haan usne bhi Kaushal ko dhokha diya tha lekin agar koi aur Kaushal ka bura kare to vo dekh nahi sakti thi. Vo Komal se poochne ka faisla karti hai.
Agle din Neha Komal ke ghar jaati hai aur usse sachchai batane ko bolti hai. Komal pahle to usse bilkul bhi baat nahi karti lekin jab vo Neha ki pareshani dekhti hai to use bata deti hai. Vo batati hai ki vo Kaushal ko sach bata chuki hai ki usne kis tarah uska use kiya. Lekin jo lamhe usne Kaushal ke saath bitaye the vo uske jeevan ke sabse achhe pal the. Kaushal ne jeevan me isse kai bade dhoke khaye hain vo ye bhi sah leta hai aur Komal to uske boyfriend ke saath ghar bulata hai. Vahi Neha ne un dono ko dekha tha.
Neha ko yah sunkar chain milta hai. jab vo jaane lagti hai to Komal usse poochh leti hai "Kya tum aaj bhe Kaushal se pyar karti ho". Komal ke paas iska koi javab nahi tha. Komal use ek baar Kaushal se milne ko bolti hai. Neha bhi sochti hai ki ek baar use Kaushal se milkar batana chahiye ki kaise uske Mausa ji aur sasur ji ne uska emotionally fayda uthaya. Vo Kaushal ke ghar ki or chal padti hai. Kaushal jab Neha ko dekhta hai to use yakeen nahi hota. Aaj usne kareeb do mahinon baad apne pyar ko dekha tha. Neha ka chehra ab pahle jaisa fresh nahi tha, Uspar kuchh nishan the jo batate hain ki kis tarah uske sasur roj uske saath sex karte hain. Par Kaushal ko un nishano se fark nahi padta hai vo Neha se aaj bhi usi tarah pyar karta hai. Isse pahle ki Neha kuchh bol pati, Kaushal use apne aur Komal ke sambandho ke baare me batane lagta hai. Vo poori sachhai se sab kuch Neha ko batata hai. Lekin mafi nahi mangta, shayad uski jaroorat nahi thi. Dono ne jeevan me galtiyan ki thi aur avaidh sambhandh banaye the. Neha bhi Kaushal ko apna haal batati hai. Kis tarah papa ji roj uske saath BDSM karte hain. Kaushal gusse se bhar jata hai. Neha Kaushal se kahti hai ko vo ek baar keval ek baar Kaushal ko pyar karna chahti hai. Use ek arsa ho gaya hai sachcha pyar kiye. Kaushal aur Neha ek doosre ko kiss karte hain. Isse pahle ki Kaushal aage badhta Neha usse kahti hai ki "Yahan nahi, come home and win me back". Kaushal us shaam ghar aata hai. Mummy ji ghar par nahi thin. Papa ji BDSM ki taiyari kar rahe the. Jab vo Kaushal ko dekhte hain to gussa ho jaate hain. Vo Neha ko jabardasti apni aur kheenchte hain. Lekin Kaushal unka haath pakad leta hai. Vo papa ji ko ek thappad mar deta hai. Papa ji apni aukat samajh jate hain. Neha apne sasus par thook deti hai aur phir apne bedroom ko or chal deti hai. Kaushal aur Neha aaj toot kar pyar karte hain.
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I am not an erotica writer so I know it would be just a mediocre attempt.
Just would like to let everybody know original story ended as writer has informed. This attempt is not to change that but its just for those who wants to end story on happy note.
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