02-03-2022, 03:23 AM
Each and every word till last para was masterpiece in itself. The conversation part among three of them was spellbinding and how it altogether led to that kiss was simply outstanding, which shows how hard the author has put his brains into use to make the first contact happen between Meera and Desai. It was actually the hardest and most exciting part that how things will mold into Desai's favour since Desai is the changed man at present and he wouldn't have tried to seduce Meera , So it was a thoughtful scenario which eventually lead to starting of their intimacy and their first touch and I must say to was handled quite well but could have been a bit better if author had elaborated a little more on the part where Desai touched Meera's hand and kissed her.The way it started with the condition of wine,Whiskey and that smell thing, was simply breathtaking and extremely exciting. The events which led to kissing were so logical that I wished their conversation part should never end. It was sooo damn erotic.
BUT WHAT THE FUCK JUST HAPPENED IN THE LAST PARA? My excitement fell straight from top floor and I went limp in a second.I was so disappointing and bad that I sooooo wish that I hadn't read the last para and wish i could undo reading it the moment I read the line of those 2 guys entering hall. Why the hell those two men were needed at this point of time?. I still can't believe what just happened. It literally gave me a headache. You completely messed it krish. Was the last para actually written by you?I doubt it.
Why don't you make Meera naked in front of whole society, that would be even better. Right ?? Why make her embarras and lose her respect infant of 2 guys. You just made Meera a characterless and cheating wife in front of 2 un required people. WHAT A DISAPPOINTMENT MAN !!!!
Now I'm sure, Desai will impress Meera by showing what he can do. Desai will show his power and make that guard and watchman disappear.
I don't understand, why do you always have to turn the story 360 degree at instant into something which reader never expected.You think readers always praise that ? Let me tell you its a NO , they don't. Here you over estimated this and in turn it back fired and fell flat.I wish I had never read the part next to the point where krish and Meera Kissed because after that 2 disappointments were given to us. First this bringing 2 guys out of no where and second , you again made Meera engage with Desai when Krish is not even watching them.
I sooooo damn knew that as soon as Meera and Desai are alone, we won't know what they are doing and at instant she would be found in undressed state and this would happen only when krish is not watching.I now you don't care but I am sick of this thing happening each and every fucking time. Why the hell Krish is always missed out from the details which lead to start of intimate things with Meera.You always make him reach either when everything has already happened or when it has already started and is in the middle state. This is such a fucking turn off when we don't get to know what actually happened in real which led to things.
Now we readers along with Krish would never know how Desai and Meera ended up like that in semi nude state.The starting part of every intimacy is the most exciting and here you again snatched it away from us. What conversation actually happened between Meera and Desai after they headed for hall which eventually made Meera half naked? What were they talking while going towards hall? We will never get to know these details because it's now Meera who will be telling all these details to Krish in her own words and language.This thing has been done repeatedly and it has started to cause frustration.
I am seriously sick of this thing that we don't get to see things happening live from Krish's end. I so damn knew that after the kiss something illogical will happen and magically Meera would be found in intimate state in mid way. It would have been so so better if removal of Meera's clothes and how it all started would have happened when Krish was watching them hiding somewhere. I can't believe you fail to understand the point that conversation or things done just before getting intimate actually is the reason which excites the most.Thats why we do fore play before sex and not start with direct fucking instead. Like we don't start watching porn when its already in middle because we like to see the story even in porn that how it all started. You should understand this Mr Author if you want to get better at your job.
ALSO DEAR AUTHOR, DON'T WE ALREADY KNOW THAT DESAI HAS ALREADY FUCKED MEERA 2 YEARS BACK AND THAT TIME ALSO IT HAPPENED WHEN KRISH WAS NOT WATCHING THEM and later on details were revealed from Desai or Meera's end. Same thing you are doing here.So, Whats the use of repeating it the same way because again we all will be hearing it from Meera's point of view about hall's proceedings. Trust me these small things matter a lot.
At least this time think differently & make it happen live when Krish is watching them from beginning itself without missing any details where he doesn't have to depend on Meera to tell him the details part later on but yeah it would be better if he is hidden some where and not known to Meera because only then Krish would find out the real version of horny Meera . She might get conscious if she knows Krish is watching her and may be she would remain in shell as its the human nature. Also,I felt Meera shed her clothes too easily .Did she ever show even some fake objection to Desai when Desai must be trying to get intimate with her in hall.
How awful and idiotic it sounds that Krish who is so desperate and horny at the moment gets engaged into drinking just after his wife leaves for hall with Desai and he doesn't even care to instantly go and follow them so that he can eavesdrop on them to know how things are proceeding when Meera and Desai are alone, instead he is drinking and shagging in washroom.WOW !! Does this even make any sense?
and on top of that another major blunder that Sadashiv and watchman also saw Meera in that state.I completely fail to understand why you are making Meera naked in front of whole world. These things were meant to be discreet between Meera,Krish and Desai and discretion is more exciting than being public.
In next update you can also include more people from society who gets to watch naked Meera. That would ensure the disaster of this masterpiece.
But somewhere I feel ,May be Krish was dreaming all this as he was a little high and Meera shaking him off his dream to say that she is now taking Desai to the hall for dinner.
BUT WHAT THE FUCK JUST HAPPENED IN THE LAST PARA? My excitement fell straight from top floor and I went limp in a second.I was so disappointing and bad that I sooooo wish that I hadn't read the last para and wish i could undo reading it the moment I read the line of those 2 guys entering hall. Why the hell those two men were needed at this point of time?. I still can't believe what just happened. It literally gave me a headache. You completely messed it krish. Was the last para actually written by you?I doubt it.
Why don't you make Meera naked in front of whole society, that would be even better. Right ?? Why make her embarras and lose her respect infant of 2 guys. You just made Meera a characterless and cheating wife in front of 2 un required people. WHAT A DISAPPOINTMENT MAN !!!!
Now I'm sure, Desai will impress Meera by showing what he can do. Desai will show his power and make that guard and watchman disappear.
I don't understand, why do you always have to turn the story 360 degree at instant into something which reader never expected.You think readers always praise that ? Let me tell you its a NO , they don't. Here you over estimated this and in turn it back fired and fell flat.I wish I had never read the part next to the point where krish and Meera Kissed because after that 2 disappointments were given to us. First this bringing 2 guys out of no where and second , you again made Meera engage with Desai when Krish is not even watching them.
I sooooo damn knew that as soon as Meera and Desai are alone, we won't know what they are doing and at instant she would be found in undressed state and this would happen only when krish is not watching.I now you don't care but I am sick of this thing happening each and every fucking time. Why the hell Krish is always missed out from the details which lead to start of intimate things with Meera.You always make him reach either when everything has already happened or when it has already started and is in the middle state. This is such a fucking turn off when we don't get to know what actually happened in real which led to things.
Now we readers along with Krish would never know how Desai and Meera ended up like that in semi nude state.The starting part of every intimacy is the most exciting and here you again snatched it away from us. What conversation actually happened between Meera and Desai after they headed for hall which eventually made Meera half naked? What were they talking while going towards hall? We will never get to know these details because it's now Meera who will be telling all these details to Krish in her own words and language.This thing has been done repeatedly and it has started to cause frustration.
I am seriously sick of this thing that we don't get to see things happening live from Krish's end. I so damn knew that after the kiss something illogical will happen and magically Meera would be found in intimate state in mid way. It would have been so so better if removal of Meera's clothes and how it all started would have happened when Krish was watching them hiding somewhere. I can't believe you fail to understand the point that conversation or things done just before getting intimate actually is the reason which excites the most.Thats why we do fore play before sex and not start with direct fucking instead. Like we don't start watching porn when its already in middle because we like to see the story even in porn that how it all started. You should understand this Mr Author if you want to get better at your job.
ALSO DEAR AUTHOR, DON'T WE ALREADY KNOW THAT DESAI HAS ALREADY FUCKED MEERA 2 YEARS BACK AND THAT TIME ALSO IT HAPPENED WHEN KRISH WAS NOT WATCHING THEM and later on details were revealed from Desai or Meera's end. Same thing you are doing here.So, Whats the use of repeating it the same way because again we all will be hearing it from Meera's point of view about hall's proceedings. Trust me these small things matter a lot.
At least this time think differently & make it happen live when Krish is watching them from beginning itself without missing any details where he doesn't have to depend on Meera to tell him the details part later on but yeah it would be better if he is hidden some where and not known to Meera because only then Krish would find out the real version of horny Meera . She might get conscious if she knows Krish is watching her and may be she would remain in shell as its the human nature. Also,I felt Meera shed her clothes too easily .Did she ever show even some fake objection to Desai when Desai must be trying to get intimate with her in hall.
How awful and idiotic it sounds that Krish who is so desperate and horny at the moment gets engaged into drinking just after his wife leaves for hall with Desai and he doesn't even care to instantly go and follow them so that he can eavesdrop on them to know how things are proceeding when Meera and Desai are alone, instead he is drinking and shagging in washroom.WOW !! Does this even make any sense?
and on top of that another major blunder that Sadashiv and watchman also saw Meera in that state.I completely fail to understand why you are making Meera naked in front of whole world. These things were meant to be discreet between Meera,Krish and Desai and discretion is more exciting than being public.
In next update you can also include more people from society who gets to watch naked Meera. That would ensure the disaster of this masterpiece.
But somewhere I feel ,May be Krish was dreaming all this as he was a little high and Meera shaking him off his dream to say that she is now taking Desai to the hall for dinner.
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