22-01-2022, 07:32 AM
Reasons why previous continuation failed
- change of POV, the original was unique because it had two things, the written email of the wife and husband secretly watching via camera. The inconsistency between them .
- addition of too many characters in too short time
- making the wife a shameless slut. The original teased of sex in 4 chapters and then only consummate it but they took it so interesting.
- the character of Dara, there was a dry humour in his actions..
- change of POV, the original was unique because it had two things, the written email of the wife and husband secretly watching via camera. The inconsistency between them .
- addition of too many characters in too short time
- making the wife a shameless slut. The original teased of sex in 4 chapters and then only consummate it but they took it so interesting.
- the character of Dara, there was a dry humour in his actions..
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